Don't Hide

by Brittany C   Jul 9, 2007


Why do you hide,
from the world outside?
Just go for the ride
and forget need to hide.
Don't let the pain build up inside.

You just want to be free.
So go sit by the sea.
While there talk to a friend
so that in the end,
your soul will grow
and the sky will glow.

Your soul is now free to fly,
high in the clear blue sky.
So please don't hide
blocked from the world outside,
and let your heart sore high.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    "and forget [the] need to hide."
    `It seemed more grammatically correct, and flowed better.

    An inspirational piece, nevertheless. (I supposed it should be in the life/society section.) It sincerely enriched my heart with the warmth of Hope, Light, Life, and Love. :] My real pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing. 5.0

    Best wishes,
    Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    I enjoy the overall concept, because as much as we can run..we can never really hide..

    "You just want to be free.
    and maybe climb a tree"

    I dont like the "climb a tree" line, it just seemed like it was forced in there for the rhyme...when you're using a strict rhyming scheme, be sure to watch for that..one thing to try, is to write the poem out as a free verse to get the message in, then play with the words a bit until everything fits in.

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