Ventriloquist

by Stephanie Naylor   Jul 18, 2007


You control me
this cant be

i wanna be real
i wanna feel

Never again do i want to do what you say
Never again not tomorrow not today

I don't wanna be ruled by you
but what else can i do

I will break free
I will make you see

I am real,not just a doll
You, and your reign will fall

I will bring you down
No longer on my face will i wear a frown

It will be a big wide smile
while all the while

I will rule you
now, what can you do

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  • 16 years ago

    by Myke Roeschlein

    I've never really seen a writing style like this. Well I have, but you put a different spin on it. Way to go.

    Vote and comment back. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is both interesting and creative.
    Different in concept, which made for a refreshing read.
    I did think that there were to many fillers (I, you etc) which sometimes disrupted the flow.
    Apart from that however, I think this is effective and well written.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I can relate to this piece, it's very dark and powerful, greatly written.
    My favorite lines are:
    -i wanna be real
    i wanna feel

    Never again do i want to do what you say
    Never again not tomorrow not today-
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashley Apparatus

    I liked it=]
    The punctuation was weak though.
    But overall it was good.

  • 16 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    The reader can feel the intensity of your words.
    The depth had so much more meaning,
    than what is normally put to poems.
    I can relate so much to this one.
    Flow was done quite well.
    Overall Rating: 5.0/5

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