My Patchwork Heart {Monorhyme Rondel}

by dollwithafrown   Jul 20, 2007


It's been stitched in the left corner, zipped up in the right.
My patchwork heart has finally ceased to beat,
It had to finally give in to the pain, admitted defeat.
No longer could it handle all those dark and lonely nights.

It was vulgar, disgusting, an extreme and sorry sight,
The day you left me lying on the ground, holding onto your feet.
It's been stitched in the left corner, zipped up in the right,
My patchwork heart has finally ceased to beat.

No longer could I keep it up, I had long ago lost the fight;
It's time for me to get out of the fire, I can no longer brave the heat,
I am now the only person who can make my life complete.
Now my heart is broken, damaged with all the fright,
It's been stitched in the left corner, zipped up in the right.

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A monorhyme rondel is a French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Synh

    I think the 'admitted' in the 2nd line should just be 'admit'.

    I like the 'it's been zipped in the left corner, stitched in the right' line you used repeatedly. Added a lot of flavor to the poem when you used it like that.

    I enjoyed reading this. It was so true. I like it because anyone can relate to it about any topic, and not just 'oh, my boyfriend broke my heart' but they can relate to it as 'my mom died' or 'my dog has cancer' or something like that. And i personal believe that any person who can write a poem that anyone can relate to about any topic is a pure genius and has a true gift.

    Excellent job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    The arduous misery drawn out by the subject was disquieting. The tone was highly strung and the emotions raw and well expressed. The rhythm was hasty, whereas the rhymes rather forced. But then, again... it was a pleasurable read. It was, in fact, a huge metaphorical poem of a patchwork heart. Nice one, as always. All the best and take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Great peom with nice vocabulary used....all the way 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Im so sorry if you had to go through this....

    the poem is very interesting though... i like the choice of words .... especially the part that kept repeating...

    i really enjoyed reading this poem.

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