This is an amazingly powerful poem. It is absolutely amazing. You can really feel the hurt the guy has caused. 5/5

Kalee

Wow to me taht was a 4.5 that rounds up to a 5 lol and i posted a new poem if your interested

It was a good poem. it was a unique poem.. You have a good vocab.. I rarely see people use (; and -) a suggestion to improve this.. try to use metaphors =) But it's just a suggestion.

Anyway, great work once again. Keep writing =)

While i was reading it i was thinking
well its not as good as her others
and then i read the last line

and that last line made it all different
it made me love it

nice job

5/5

When I first started reading it I wasn't that keen on the poem but as I kept reading it got deep and more interesting. The title was unique and had me thinking about what this poem could be about. Altogether you have created a great read. 5/5~mel

"Still as the moon in the sky
Your body remains as cold as your heart
No warmth you shall supply"

^ I liked how you portrayed the corpse with similes. The mental images conjured were quite elaborate and vivid. Nicely done.

"Your heart now rests in my palm"

^ You've encompassed Eternity with that line. It seemed to point up that you have complete power and influence over his mortality (heart), which was rather peculiar, and led me to believe that there might be some sort of a tale behind this tale.

"How now you can not hurt my soul"

^ Thanks for giving me a trace of suspicion. :) Now, it's quite paradoxical to note how wonderful and inspirational this being must had been to you, whereas at the same time he had inflicted physical and nonphysical pain towards you. Guess he's not that all perfect. Besides, the subject never seemed to feel sad over his death. Indifferent, rather. Odd.

I may have taken the wrong idea; but, hey, I apparently enjoyed reading this poem. Cleverly ironical and quite imaginative to say the least. All the best and take care!

Marian

Good poem and Iliked it. Good flow and word choice. I would like to suggest you to revise these lines

How now you can not hurt my soul

You like them have joined the black parade

Tc 4/5

I like first stanza a lot. I don't like second stanza at all. Third stanza is good but whole piece could be a lot better. i think that it deserves 4/5

It was amazing! All the emotions to it all the pictures going on in mind while reading. Loved the story you telling in it also. Great poem.
5/5

Quite an interesting poem. The flow was utterly great and very creative.

How now you can not hurt my soul
You like them have joined the black parade

I'm kind of confused with these two lines though, as if somethings wrong with the grammar. But oh well, maybe its just me.

Great job though.

This was really powerful...The imagery was realy good...And the flow was just amazing through out the whole thing..

Excellent job....

Overall- 5/5.

Wonderful poem.....flowed nicely and the rhyming was perfect...and i love the vocab choice....

the second stanza was my favorite.

nice job.5/5

Nicely done, I enjoyed reading this piece. This first stanza was most impressive, it really caught my eye. Great work, keep it up.