by Marius Laun Jul 28, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
first love
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Your shining hair |
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So sweet kind of pushing cutesy, but it works. The flow was great. Message was good. 5/5 from me. |
by Unamed
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This was really sweet!...good job!! |
by Yvonne
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Aw! Cute! It was so simple, and yet so beautiful! Keep writing! |
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Concise yet it held vast meanings. I really love the way it flowed and simplicity of each line. Not bad at all. 5/5 |
by Nix
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Fist two stanzas are incredible and they are written amazingly. Last two stanzas are bad. This is just my opinion but I think that you could write them better. 4/5 |