I Just Thought You Should Know. ( VOTE. )

by Myke Roeschlein   Jul 31, 2007


I'd give you my last breath,
If that's what would make you smile.
I'd fight until my very death,
Just to show you this is worth while.

I could just kiss you forever,
But only if you'd let me.
The day I leave is never,
Just you wait and see.

I'm not perfect at anything,
But I pride myself in loving you
And I've made you my everything
That was a lot of work to do

You stole the breath from my lungs,
When you first looked at my face.
Now we're here speaking in tongues,
I fear you'll leave without a trace.

Like you did once before,
Though you've long been forgiven..
When you walk out that door,
I just can't help but give in..

To the piercing in my heart,
That brings me to my knees.
I always end up where I start,
I just wish you'd hear my pleas.

You've always been so close,
But seem so out of reach.
And I know these little love notes,
Won't close the gap in you and me.

I pray that this doesn't end,
Not now, and not ever.
You're my lover, my best friend,
And we're better off together.

You're too much for me to give up,
I can't seem to just let you go.
And you're everything to me,
I just thought I'd let you know.

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  • 16 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Just to show you this is worth while.
    `It sounds awkward to me when I read that line out loud with the first stanza.
    I feel the second stanza -- you could do more with.

    I'm not perfect at anything,
    But I pride myself in loving you
    `I love those lines. They're just amazing and contain a strong emotion.

    You stole the breath from my lungs,
    When you first looked at my face.
    Now we're here speaking in tongues,
    I fear you'll leave without a trace.
    `I really adore the use of sweet emotion in the first two lines, and then the contradicting of fears and "speaking tongue."

    Won't close the gap in you and me.
    `Another awkward line, though I do enjoy that stanza.

    I pray that this doesn't end,
    Not now, and not ever.
    You're my lover, my best friend,
    And we're better off together.
    `I will forever worship that stanza. Such a cliche idea that people use all the time, but you, you make it work beautifully. Along with the way you end it -- again, overused, but with your poem, it's just delightful.

    Overall, a real nice piece of work.
    --..MiNDYY

  • 16 years ago

    by Genna

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  • 16 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    JUST AMAZIN, i feel this same EXACT way about my current boyfriend. 5/5 i love it

  • 16 years ago

    by ourlilsecret

    I luv this poem!! ... Great Job!! =]]

  • 16 years ago

    by sheila

    Love it!=]

    * $heila *

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