Comments : Tears

  • 12 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This was good laura, it was short, but it was deep and true, but sad.
    the flow was good as well, and the rhyming was very strong.
    i loved it
    5/5
    gabriella

  • 12 years ago

    by Viola

    Hey,
    well this is another great poem of your that I absolutely love.
    the flow was great, the emotions runs so deep. and generally the whole thing was penned so well.
    i was taken away by this stanza in particular:

    Memories are gone
    Because it was never real
    How can you remember
    If there was nothing there to feel

    ^sigh. I know what you mean. But I am very much hoping you are ok hunn. and that there is hope. but anyways i'm not gonna try to convince you on here. just PM me for anything.

    the poem was great! sorrowful but just beautifully writen.
    keep it up! =]
    --Viola

  • 12 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    A tear for every word
    That is left unsaid
    They fall from my face
    As I sit on my bed

    those were my fav. lines! this poem was absolutley beautiful!it really touched me! i have seen sum of your other stuff and well you are really great!And this was really great! great job! im super impressed!

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Reaper

    Another amazing piece of work by you. It was so touching. I could feel the sorrow in each word. And I......
    Great job deep it up. 5/5 from me.

  • 12 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Very elegant, and extremely emotional.

    Suggestion?
    You started strong, you ended well. Somewhere in the middle the stanzas were a bit more blah.

    But, all the same, nice job.

  • Wow girl these are some deep words keep it up. and don't let anyone make you feel soo bad. i truly feel your pain. smile and take care!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Riz

    The first two stanzas made me cry ;~;. I don't know why but it was just so emotional. I loved it! It was really, really emotional. I hope you feel better. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Fsams

    Beautiful dear, the word choice and the flow is great. The words strung beautifully to each other. I like the way you have structured and made it cohesive. 5/5
    tc
    Fsams

  • 12 years ago

    by Kyle

    Wow i loved your poem, it was so emotional and just awesome. good jobs

  • 12 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This was so heartfelt, but i could see every word was right from ur heart,which made it a great poem.
    i really adore your talent as you are truly an artist , mastering the art of poetry.

  • 12 years ago

    by Mr M

    This is so moving Laura. I think this is my favorite verse:

    "How many tears
    Can be in one eye
    You can never imagine
    The ones that I cry"

    I think we can all see this point of view...

  • Wow!That was a really good poemI know what it's like to just sit and cry and cry and cry until I can't cry anymore.I personally relate to this poem and I know a lot of others can as well.Very good.5/5

    <3Amber

  • 12 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Laura, very nicely written! I could feel the emotion seep out of your words and the flow was perfect. Thanks for you comment! :)
    5/5
    Ciao

  • 12 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    Wow simply b-e-a-utiful
    I like the lines how many tears can be in 1 eye

    that is deep and touching b/c we've all had times when we cried our eyes love this poem mwah mwah

  • 12 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    The tear is left unheard
    But as it falls it screams
    `i LOVE the , I think it's called, personification ? there . It really jumped at me .

    Memories are gone
    Because it was never real
    How can you remember
    If there was nothing there to feel
    `Beautiful stanza . Loved it .

    And the ending is perfect . So true to so many of us -- at point someone feels this way and some just won't accept that we aren't really LiViNG because of our fears .

    Nice job, hon .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 12 years ago

    by x Mo x

    That was so beautifully sad.

    "The tear is left unheard
    But as it falls it screams
    I don't want to return
    To my horrible dreams"

    Thats my favorite stanza. I really liked the second line best. I've never heard anyone talk about crying like this. Its brilliant!

    The first stanza's flow was a little rocky, it wasnt as smooth as the rest of the poem, but once it got going it was smooth and clear.
    Great Job!

    ~Mo~

  • 12 years ago

    by paul alexander

    Huh very good u did nice keep in touch babe lol bye

  • 12 years ago

    by elizabeth

    I thought it was really good can u add ur comment to my poems atleast one of them plz and give me advice on how to make em good

  • 12 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Wow...that seriously left me speechless O_O a good speechless. the flow was amazing and it gives you chills. once again, good chills. you can almost feel the tears coming down. you are such a great writer!!! keep it up, love!

  • 12 years ago

    by Veamm

    I truly enjoyed it..well try to read my piece too..lol..nicely done..5/5