Wow - I started to read that and got a bit confused half way through as to who "she" and "I" was - I was thinking you were just swapping from first to third person but accident - but then at the end I realised what was going on.
It was a very twisted piece, Some of it made sense and parts didn't , but it fell together at the end, I liked that, It flowed pretty good, but it was a bit inconstistant, It was one of those poems that got me thinking about life, and the irony in it, Good work, 5/5
Wow, that was an amazing write! a very twisted peice. The ending really turned over the whole poem, and showed some real depth. Your words were incredible, they really lead you to see this scared and unknown image. I loved the crystaline tear imagery. thought that gave the poem a nice touch.