A Perfect Love Story.

by Miu   Aug 7, 2007


Starry night, a yellow moon.
Two lost souls meeting in this place soon.
An innocent love, joys they share.
Only about each other they really care.
There they walk, holding hands.
Rocky beach, toes in sand.
No words need to be told,
No emotions need to be displayed.
Silence is telling everything there needs to be said.
On crack of dawn they leave again,
To place far from each others hands.

A perfect love story-
In their hearts, it will never end.

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  • 16 years ago

    by ali

    Awwww soo sweet!!! made me smile...:D
    great stuff 5/5
    love n hugs!!! ali x

  • 16 years ago

    by Megamidget3

    Hey! me! :D question...how do u get sooooo many comments? i have NONE!...apperently, i dont write good...lol. but VERY nice poem...see? u can write love poems! lol. love u PBFL! 5/5!

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    "No words need to be told,
    No emotions need to be displayed.
    Silence is telling everything there needs to be said."

    Now, that's refreshing. Though tersely expressed, the poem itself have encompassed so much intangible things already. Its simplicity further endears the poem to me. I could easily relate to it, most especially to the aforementioned lines. Hardly any poems within this week have captured my heart than this. Thanks for the opportunity.

    I, too, feel that it needs to be expanded with more coherent details. It seems to me to be a mere portion of an even greater poem. But then, again... it's pretty neat and nice on it's own at its current structure and substance. A joy to read such a perfect love story. All the best.

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Thats like a dream come true for me.....to get out of this place and be hand in hand with my lover....Excellent poem...what a beautiful picture you've created!

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    A Beautiful Start:)

    I think you could expand this peice, and make it more precisely 'A Perfect Love Story'.
    Spliting it up into stanza's would definitly help.
    But it was still and excellent poem.
    The flow was flawless,
    and the rymthes very cute.

    Keep it up,
    Elaine.

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