Comments : Her old picture and letters

  • 11 years ago

    by Nix

    This looks like some kind of story. I don't like the first two stanzas. You expressed emotions greatly.
    -her face captured my eyes,
    old memories recalled their golden time
    for one second, I found her in front of me,
    her hand, touched my heart-
    ^This stanza is INCREDIBLY written. I love it.
    This piece still deserves 4/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tine

    Heeya hassan
    this poem is just beautiful. You're a great writer, but i already knew that, right! ;) i tried to nominate this one for the contest but i can't nominate :S same problem you had yesterday... but anyway ;) keep it up !
    x

  • 11 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    A beautiful piece, a joy to read. You certainly are a talent. What inspired this piece? May I ask.. Feel free to comment any of mine, keep in touch though!
    Greta P.S I'm adding you to my favorites, so I can keep an eye on your work, hope you can do the same!
    Love Greta xox

  • 11 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    A beautiful piece, a joy to read. You certainly are a talent. What inspired this piece? May I ask.. Feel free to comment any of mine, keep in touch though!
    Greta P.S I'm adding you to my favorites, so I can keep an eye on your work, hope you can do the same!
    Love Greta xox

  • 11 years ago

    by Cindy

    Hassan
    Beautiful piece. Very heartfelt. Brought tears to my eyes. Great imagery.
    Take care your friend Cindy

  • 11 years ago

    by Sourav

    Beautifully written... It's very emotional and touchy... keep writing... Well done on this one!

  • 11 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    That was a great poem...
    Good job!

    God bless u

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful sad poems you penned here my friend...You expressed them within beautiful emotions.... remain of memories that couldn't forget...anyway, keep them coming, take care.

  • 11 years ago

    by megann anne

    I really liked this poem. it was very well written. extremely sad though.. i have been through that, in some sort of way. keep writing. and thanks for the comment on my poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tamon G

    Good poem, beautifully written. filled with imagery and emotion, especially in the ending....keep up the good work

  • 11 years ago

    by JaMeS

    Nice work i especially like this cuplet

    her face captured my eyes,
    old memories recalled their golden time

    keep writing :)

  • 11 years ago

    by A F

    Aww.
    omg.
    so sad.
    i'm so sorry.
    i loved this.
    xxx.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    I liked the story you pulled in at this masterpiece..It was so cute and touching and was totally breathtaking

    My fave lines are;

    After seven years ,
    her old picture is in my hand
    time stayed for one second
    and a drop fall into that picture
    maybe that was my tear

    Keep it up,
    Laura

  • 11 years ago

    by Barry

    Very moving poem............ 5

  • 11 years ago

    by Rasheed Khokhar

    A very beautyful Poem with feeling of real love .... I appreciate your Immeginary Job .... :) GOD BLESS YOU.

  • 11 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    Beautiful writings..
    Excellent thoughts..
    Marvelous outlooks..
    Fantastic feelings..
    *********************************

    Write more, feel more and be with me for reading and commenting.. I like your poems very much indeed... 5/5

    *************************************
    Nazeer

  • 11 years ago

    by lish

    This is soo sweet, i love this poem alot the feeling is overwhelming, its great xox

  • 11 years ago

    by turtle

    I really wasn't expecting much during the first few stanzas.... but after reading on, i was sooo wrong! this is one beautifully written piece!..it is so full of emotion and you can really picture it in your mind

    great job!...

  • 11 years ago

    by The Sky is Falling

    Wow, this poem is so sad, but I loved it. It's written from the heart and that's the best way a poem can be written. You are a very good poet. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Rabeya

    Is this based on a true story??