This looks like some kind of story. I don't like the first two stanzas. You expressed emotions greatly.
-her face captured my eyes,
old memories recalled their golden time
for one second, I found her in front of me,
her hand, touched my heart-
^This stanza is INCREDIBLY written. I love it.
This piece still deserves 4/5

Heeya hassan
this poem is just beautiful. You're a great writer, but i already knew that, right! ;) i tried to nominate this one for the contest but i can't nominate :S same problem you had yesterday... but anyway ;) keep it up !
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A beautiful piece, a joy to read. You certainly are a talent. What inspired this piece? May I ask.. Feel free to comment any of mine, keep in touch though!
Greta P.S I'm adding you to my favorites, so I can keep an eye on your work, hope you can do the same!
Love Greta xox

A beautiful piece, a joy to read. You certainly are a talent. What inspired this piece? May I ask.. Feel free to comment any of mine, keep in touch though!
Greta P.S I'm adding you to my favorites, so I can keep an eye on your work, hope you can do the same!
Love Greta xox

Hassan
Beautiful piece. Very heartfelt. Brought tears to my eyes. Great imagery.
Take care your friend Cindy

Beautifully written... It's very emotional and touchy... keep writing... Well done on this one!

That was a great poem...
Good job!

God bless u

Beautiful sad poems you penned here my friend...You expressed them within beautiful emotions.... remain of memories that couldn't forget...anyway, keep them coming, take care.

I really liked this poem. it was very well written. extremely sad though.. i have been through that, in some sort of way. keep writing. and thanks for the comment on my poem.

Good poem, beautifully written. filled with imagery and emotion, especially in the ending....keep up the good work

Nice work i especially like this cuplet

her face captured my eyes,
old memories recalled their golden time

keep writing :)

Aww.
omg.
so sad.
i'm so sorry.
i loved this.
xxx.

I liked the story you pulled in at this masterpiece..It was so cute and touching and was totally breathtaking

My fave lines are;

After seven years ,
her old picture is in my hand
time stayed for one second
and a drop fall into that picture
maybe that was my tear

Keep it up,
Laura

Very moving poem............ 5

A very beautyful Poem with feeling of real love .... I appreciate your Immeginary Job .... :) GOD BLESS YOU.

Beautiful writings..
Excellent thoughts..
Marvelous outlooks..
Fantastic feelings..
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Write more, feel more and be with me for reading and commenting.. I like your poems very much indeed... 5/5

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Nazeer

This is soo sweet, i love this poem alot the feeling is overwhelming, its great xox

I really wasn't expecting much during the first few stanzas.... but after reading on, i was sooo wrong! this is one beautifully written piece!..it is so full of emotion and you can really picture it in your mind

great job!...

Wow, this poem is so sad, but I loved it. It's written from the heart and that's the best way a poem can be written. You are a very good poet. 5/5

Is this based on a true story??