Conversation.

by Birgit   Aug 10, 2007


You have to see this poem, as a conversation between a good angel and a bad angel. Or something like that. The good angel sees everything positive, and wants to let go of her past. And the bad angel, doesn't want to let go to her past and sees most things negatively. The first two stanza's.. is me. And then the good angel starts and then the bad angel .. and then the good one again. Etc. =]

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And here I am,
Sitting in my blanket,
Holding on to my thoughts,
Cause that's all I have, that's basically it.

My thoughts are confused,
But not in a bad way,
They are telling me so much,
But this is what I'll say..

You don't love him
You just like him a lot.
Because he is a nice boy,
And he sure is hot.

But you've just been broken,
By that other boy,
And girl, he used you,
Like some dumb a s s toy.

Well sure, it hurts me.
That he has broken my heart,
But I think the new boy,
Will not dare to tear it apart.

You are crazy,
You're going insane,
You really want to do this?
And start a new game?

I don't see love as a game,
It's just.. I don't know,
I'm feeling something..
And he's the one to blame..

Girl, really.. take you time.
Hold your horses,
Relax your mind..
Then things will come together.

Yeah.. Yeah.. I guess I will.
Maybe, I am just too fast,
Just got to relax,
And sit still.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sourav

    First two stanzas are pretty good. very interesting to read. nice poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Birgit,

    This, I believe, is nicely written. Though I've read countless works depicting an inner confusion with a similar approach, this piece certainly hits home with me. It reminds me of the Great Controversy, or the battle within the mind. I like how seemingly sincere and heartfelt it is as well. Emotions are apparently poignant, throughout. Adorable. :] (I finally got the idea; however, I will hold my horses from teasing you though. :P)

    Love,
    Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Dance Girlie

    This poem is awesome. Very creative. :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Hebe

    This is a very interesting poem.
    I really like the idea of a conversation between that good and bad angel of yours, very creative.
    The rhyming is good, but sometimes it's a bit off.. but I don't think that really matters in this poem.
    A great piece of writing.
    In short: It's a great poem and a pleasure to read.
    Take care
    Your friend
    Hebe

  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    Very good the way you use two diffrent peoples conversation to mimic the fight thats going on inside however I cant help feal that a poem should not need an explnation befor it is read.
    work hard just like you i'm trying to improve and hopfully we will both find insperation.

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