Another fine written piece by you. It's really good to read something different now.. Flow was okay, keep up the good work.

My favorite stanza:
"One slice, two slice,
Three slice, four.
Make myself bleed,
A little bit more."

Wow this is a great poem. it makes me kind of sad and then again it makes me laugh because well i dont know why. lol. but it is really sad :[ but 5/5

This is such a sad poem. I love the word choice and how strongly everything is put together. Keep up the good work and take care =)

Dizziness and lightheaded,
Everything's a blurr.
Reminise our moments together,
And despise everything you were.

Fave lines ^^^

~ Lainey

I'm not being rude when I say this but I can not say I liked it. It was a good poem, rhyming, it flowed, it was great. But I just don't like this type of poetry. Other than that I truly can not say It was bad, at all. It was great. 5/5 Keep it up.

I'm not really fond of the concept of this piece. It's rather sad and depressing, I don't like suicide poems. Nonetheless you penned it perfectly. Rhymes and flow were great. 5/5

marcella

Hands are trembling,
Knees are weak.
Face is pale,
Death I seek.

These lines are very beautiful and very poetic at the same time. The poem is explicit and cool 5/5

Tc
Fsams

VerY lovinG sentenceS yoU useD herE. mE luV yR stylE oF writinG thaT keepS mE verY joY..... 5/5

luzaN

Wow! This was powerful, the flow was abolsutely perfect.
This was the best poem i have read in a while.
It was just so perfectly written.
5/5 for sure
love Tara-Kay
x

I usually really dislike suicidal poems but this wasnt bad it was filled with emotion!!

*crys* i cant choose which poem is my favorite now that i read this one :(
ugh lol
I LOVE THIS ONE THO

~Mz.Raven

Wow, this one is so powerful, filled with emotions. I like everything about this poem, it's excellently written from the beginning to the end, every stanza has flawless wording, flow and the atmosphere. The imagery is very vivid.
Well done, 5/5 from me

Ya already kno this is my favorite! i love it!

U keep up the good work... nd if u need anybody to talk to im here for you

Its sad but in way it sends across a very powerful message to anyone who reads it. i think that message is does it really have to end this way
5/5

Wow thats deep....

This has got to be my fave poem of yours. I love the rhyme scheme and structure, it flows so well. Nice work.

Well holy SHAMOLEY ! A side not to you, I go bonkers when I read self harm poems because usually...you read one and then you`ve read them all...but I have to say, wow...you made me speechless, not an easy thing to do lol. I think that the fact that you added in the song/riddle to this poem made it a little more personal and brought it all together overall...but yet, people will still be able to relate to this, a very good thing to find in a poem. You tied the title into this well, kept the flow in tact, imagery and wording was great...and you balanced the strength maturely...the beginning was weaker and it got stronger as it went on. Enough of my blabbing, VERY good job, Darling.

5.5
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Really strong emotive poem, great work. I especially liked the little rhyme:

"One slice, two slice,
Three slice, four.
Make myself bleed,
A little bit more."

Great pace aswell. 5/5

Em xXx

I've thought of that before, it is hard to live life and harder more when you cut yourself through it, I hope you get over this part of your life and move on to a cut free life.