Nice poem.. You put a fine emotion in your poem, but I think the words were too common.. Trying to find better choice of words, Taz.. ^^
Well done..

You've improved alot from the first poems you have posted on this site so well done on that. This had sweet emotions I enjoyed it alot. Well done on writing this! ~mel

Fantastic poem........
i can really feel the emotions you want to share...

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By the way I have some corrections
I think the word fell it must be changed with the word feel....but still your work is great...

5/5

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Isa lng pala ung mali hindi marami....hehehe

I try to laugh,
even my mind is sad
I try to escape,
but my heart hate

wow. i loved yourthis poem it relates to me. i likes that stanza alot. gd wrk you deserve 5

Wow i know what you mean i loved this one 5/5

That is soooo random, it doesnt coborate and there is no spark to it, Honestly....by reading three of ur poems, the comment i have left in the others go for this poem exactly, it/THEY JUST DON'T WORK!!! i'm being HONEST here!
You seriously need to fix them all up including the ones I havent read...ok, otherwise ....ur poems arnt just gona reach good....
But I feel they have potential...
Good luck..
Hidden

Standing in dark street,
waiting you to speak
I feel the night too slow,
and feel that you don't want to glow
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My only wish
for you to be kiss,
even in short of time
for you, I will be on the line

This was beautiful written, but some of them you've to change.. even though simply but beautiful expressed emotions. anyway, keep them coming, it will help you...have a good day, take care.

I like the concept of this poem, you can feel the emotion. I am sending you a PM on a few things that I think may help it to flow better. Well done!

A nice poem, but I thought it could have been more vivid. For I was'nt sure where you were going to. I really liked the opening best, very good. Great job, keep it up.

It was a sweet poem, very heartfelt. You're getting better, so well done. I didn't really like the ending, because it didn't sound like an ending, if you know what I mean.

Good attempt.

I don't like last lines in the second, third and the fourth stanza. This poem has excellent imagery!

Wow beautifully written
5/5 from me
xx

Wow this poem is so strong

It seemed as though you have more than one idea for this one. i liked it but it was sorta everywhere, like you had long sentences and short sentences. it didn't really appeal to me as much as other poems do. i give you a 4/5. sorry

Overall a great poem. I gave 5/5 I like the way you write your poems. Keep it up my dear

Tc'
Fsams

Try eliminating some of the fillers (I, and, you etc) as a lot of the time the flow runs much smoother for it.
I really liked the end stanza, I thought it was very powerful and moving.