by Lost IN a RIVER of Tears Aug 16, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
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I thought forever, you would be mine. |
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I think if u could make the poem rhymed,It would be much better..But anyway U did a good job and it was nice ... |
by Nix
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It is interesting. I like last five lines, but you could to create stronger atmosphere. You could use some metaphors that makes poem a lot better. |