I liked this poem, it should some strong feelings, but I have to give u a 4/5, only because of the choice of your words. But nicely done!

Aww hunny. You don't want to die. Even though this person lied to you and they don't love you. But that doesn't mean other people don't. If you need to talk, I'll be here. I've been through the same thing. =)

As for the poem, I thought it was good. It flowed nicely, followed the rhyming scheme, and it had a little emotion in it. I would've liked to have seen a little more of that, but it's fine the way it is. Great job. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Good poem..though i wasnt expecting the harsh ending..but it definitely had a lot of emotion to it in the end..try putting it all through out..it would be less striking unless its what you are going for..but the flow was great..really good at that..keep up the great writes!

This was such a strong poem, i wasnt expecting the harsh ending, but tht really showe how much you are hurting, the poemwas well written espite the harsh reality of it, it had a good flow, and was very heartfelt. Im sorry to hear what you have gone through, i can really relate. but you will find someone who will always make you happy.. so dont give up!!!
xxx

The third stanza was absolutely my favorite! This was a good poem. Rhyming was good and it was raw, which helped play up emotions. I know how it feels to have someone promise you something, and then having it taken away. Good job.
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Ciao

A good poem the flow is a little off and I wasen't sure about some of the wording but except for this it is very well written.

Wow i could tell there was a whole lot of emotion in it a lot of anger twoards the end!
you wrote it with such strong words! 5/5

Wonderful,
the flow was flawless and the emotion was there. Your talent really showed in this piece, it was fantastic.

Hmm i think this sometimes when certain things happen :[ and it makes me sad that my besty is thinking it because if you died..oh my i prolly would too! lol =]

Hey lol i really like this poem...i can relate lol um the swearing is really great enphesisies it wonderfully
xox bree xox keep up the work

I am not gonna tell u i kno how u feel but i will tell u keep up the great work and life will work out fa ya eventually

You have all the ingredients in this poem, i luved it, i want to see more of your work, youre already a fav now!

I really like this poem. it tells alot and shows alot of emotion to! Keep up the work.. i really really like this one.. wanna see more! :D

Wow excellent poem!! im sher every girl here can relate....i always feel this way...well anyways i really enjoyed reading this!! 5/5

"I'm so sick of this dam- world,
Full of a--holes who constantly lie."

^^Totally agree=]...another great write!

Brooke<3