I thought this was pretty good.. It's really short.. but i guess you do get your point across..

It was kinda short but it was an okay poem :) I like the tone in this piece, good job.
I think it flowed nicely, keep it up.

They say it was short, but in truth, thats all u needed! perfect in every little way!...well, then again, its a sad poem, so that was an insult...oops, lol. u kno what i mean. keep smiling sunshine! hugs! 5/5

This poem is a mess but its very beautiful in a dark way.

Wow so much meaning but very sad i loved it though 5/5

laura

Lie, that's what you are.
A lie, you can't satisfy all,

really liked that line, it can be taken in so many ways... nice work.

I love this poem it was awesome keep up the good work doll.5/5

Cory

Wow, this is so powerful! Whole piece is absolutely effective, excellently written. I like it from the beginning to the end, it has very unique descriptions and imagery that is truly vivid. You created interesting atmosphere through it with great wording.
Excellently expressed emotions, too.
5/5 from me

It was a very good poem..
short but sweet and to the point.
Keep up writing..
you expressed the way you feel well in this poem.
again its veryy good.
xoxo
--Chelsey

That was incredible. I could feel the sadness radiate from the screen. The words were simple yet beautiful. I really enjoyed it. My favorite part that stood out above all else Don't cry for yourself,
Cry for me, Cry for the times you dared.
Lie, that's what you are.
That was my favorite part. Great Job 5/5

Wow, this is a beautiful piece, short but sweet!!!
i really liked it and i could relate to it really well, the repetition really emphasises the emotions of this piece, this is one of the best things i have read for a while!!!!
really really good stuff!!!
5/5
- ali xxxxx