Baily

Thanks guys most of my poems are broken into 4s so i decided to see what it would be like to use something different.

Dan,

This is very sweet and touching; howver, I think it ight be easier if broken up into stanzas instead of reading like a paragraph.

When it is broken up it is alot easier for the reader to digest without feling overwhelmed.

How about posting it like this....

The dearest of things
The closest of friends
Part of the family
Though they come to an end

The pain and the suffering
Through illness and death
The love and the heartbreak
That I felt as you left...

As you faded away from my life
Could i have done better?
Did I do something wrong?
Was it all my fault?

Is it something I've done?
Why did you leave?
You just had to go
The pain that you've caused may never heal

I grew too attatched
Found you then lost you
In the blink of an eye
You faded away...

Your words are exactly the same ... just broken up into stanzas for the reader.

I thought this was really sweet and touching. I really hope that you continue to write more poetry. It is one large learning experience and everyday you gain more knowledge and new ideas.

--Sher

Awww.. it's touching.. I lost my cat to Lukemia so I know how that goes..Good job though!