Eternal Walk (Collaboration)

-Expressing love within whispers
Needing to kiss sweet thoughts
Enchanting skies with passion
Feel me, drench your soul with mine-
^Wow!!! I like every word in this stanza and you created amazing atmosphere, very emotional and truly beautiful.

-Hearing your joyous echos
Sharing my inner most fantasies
Let us partake in our desires
As two hearts become one-
^First of all echos=echoes. I like first two lines but I don't like second two. They seems like they not fit and whole stanza has not powerful rhythm like the first one.

-Melodies become moments
As ageless kisses intoxicate
Touching each other's cheek
Melting forever in love-
^I really like first two lines. I don't like word:cheek it this line and concept. And I would suggest replacing word-melting- I like that picture that you created but I think that word melting can be changed with some stronger word.

Embracing our faded emotions
Singing a single song
Walking an eternal path
Together, hand in hand
^This stanza is totally incredible. I like everything about it, you described emotions superbly and it has some wonderful special tone.

Anyway (^) that is just my opinion. I really enjoyed in this piece it has really breathtaking rhythm. Well done and congrats both of you on this fantastic poem.

Breathtaking collab, so excellently written love poem. I like every line, the imagery in the whole poem is so captivating and vivid.
This line:
-Feel me, drench your soul with mine- left me completely speechless.
Well done, 5/5 from me

Amazin beautiful lovely cutteee sweet love ur work ........
wish such love woz true but past experiences teach u not to hope for much

Beautifully breathtaking.... sweet and precious words. Thats what I call true love! Well done you two....