Stars of Love Ones

by Aaron Deevers   Sep 8, 2007


I eye a star tonight
I eye a person also
I eye a love one tonight

Every star that comes out at to me
Is a love one looking down on us
Checking to see if we are all right

Sometimes we see a shooting star
That to me is a love one moving on
Moving on up to the Pearly Gates

Why you as me
Every time you see a shooting star
You wish for something
Even if that wish doesn't come true
You have made their life complete

No one knows where we go after dieing
I feel the ones who lead a good life
A life with no sins
Goes up to become a new star

You can believe me or not
Some might others won't
I'll let you decide on that

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  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    The wording was a little confusing. I think if you revised this peice, it would read clearer.

    Other than that, it is a beautiful theory, one that can not be proven, but is still beautiful too think.

    4/5 Elaine.

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I eye a star tonight
    I eye a person also
    I eye a love one tonight

    Too many I's and eyes lol Sorry it just did not read very good, I would change that up a bit and it is loved ones you mean I believe.

    Other than that I thought it was pretty good, you could jazz it up a bit, but not a bad start.

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