CRASH SOUNDS

by Melinda   Sep 9, 2007


A FLAME THAT BURNS,

THERE IS NO RETURN.

ECHOS THROUGH YOUR EARS,

NOTHING IS YOUR WORST FEAR.

FOOLING AROUND,

A SMILE UPSIDE DOWN.

WHO KNOWS WHATEVER

WE CAN SEE TOGETHER.

ONE WRONG MOVE

AND GUESS WHAT? YOU LOOSE.

SOUNDS OF A CRASH,

THERE'S NO TURNING BACK.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Um, well first off problem with all caps and then where there is rhymes...it seems rather forced. It has the emotional aspects akin to anger. There is potential in this piece but as it is...it isn't the strongest I've stumbled across. There are lines that stand out such as the first and "A SMILE UPSIDE DOWN" but as I've said the rhyming seems to kill it the most.
    ~Faith-less

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    I liked this poem. The only thing I have a real problem with is that it is all in uppercase letters. That will get you suspended. :]
    A SMILE UPSIDE DOWN.
    ^^favorite line.
    Good job.
    5.5
    Ciao~

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