I hold this one as my favourite.

Excellent!

is was deep, the ideas are real, good concept!

keep it up!

Definitely different but I liked it. I loved the symbolism of nature and secrets. The last line was definitely the best and a great way to close the poem. Flow was good as well. Keep up the great work.

Excellent use of alliteration here! Many meanings to this piece. Excellently written. Alliteration is hard to do well (I attempted at on a couple of mine-mainly 'Whispering Winds') but you have done a fantastic job in style, form and content.

Peace, poetry & power,

Gary Jurechka

This is great, bro! 5/5

Very uniwue, I've never read anything quite like it. Those last two lines though... perfection.

Very deep and emotional poem, it has great rhythm. I like idea of whole piece, very interesting and refreshing. It has truly powerful atmosphere. Well done! It deserves 5/5

Truly powerful and effective piece, very unique. I like the dark atmosphere that your created through it.
My favorite lines are:
-Secrets sell shackles,
but even shackles save your soul.-
Keep up!
5/5 from me

I have had a look through several of your poems, and you have a very definate writing style that I like.
This is probably one of my favorites, its very dark, visual, and beautifully written.
Very well done!
:)
Kat x

Wow.
i love this, darling.
100%
it's really good, great meaning. (:

keep it up.

A secret
sacks silence.

Whispers
whistle in wind.

Concern
crowds around clouds.

As formality moves,
a fog is at force.

Breathing breaks
gassing gasps.
^Aww, I found something really interesting and unique in your writing, I don't even know if you noticed it lol. In all of your previous stanzas, the main words have all started with the same letter, like "Formality, fod, force." or "Concern, crowds, clouds." I loved it. But at this stanza it stopped.. if there is anyway you could start that up again it would be simply phenominal. (:

Are secrets shocking?
Only nature tells.

Secrets sell shackles,
but even shackles save your soul.
^Very nice ending, here you started it up again, and I really stress that you should reword those two stanzas, it would make the piece really great, i think. (: