Now and Forever

The message was heartfelt, and very true. Sadly that it is so true that many people never find love that great. the poem was heartfelt, and nicely penned, you did a good job over all. Try steping up the vocab to add more power, and reread the poem out loud a couple of days after you first write it, to spot any place where the flow might be off, keepp the good work, and best wishes to your friends. 4/5

That is so true. I wish more people had this kind of love and didn't put their kids into a bad situation because of their mistake. I wish your friends the best of luck in staying together. Very nice poem. ^-^

The poem as a whole was good The only thing I would tweek a bit would be the start of the poem with the squarrel part it is a good opening but it seems a bit choppy pertaining to the animal then going staight to them and the fighting part seems too abrupt. Plot121

They fight,but their never mad for long.
`their = they're
The ones that have had love for ever,
`There shouldn't be a space in between for and ever .

Mmm ... it has its cuteness about it, but it's not the best I've read. I feel that you could've been more creative with it. Using "They" a lot took away from the poem for me. The beginning was just, wow, but as it hit the middle, my interest started to stray away .

Keep up the good work tho .
4/5
..__MiNDYY

Excellent piece sounds like me and my wife, the flow was oozing loved it

5/5

Gary.