Dracula

by The Herald   Sep 14, 2007


He stands alone in a quiet village,
a village that knows no fear,
but where there was love and life before,
hate will enter here

he comes at night to steal your soul
to take your breath away
and when you wake up to feel so cold,
you scream in your bed where you lay

as you watch the eyes that crawl around,
the eyes you can barely see
the eyes that burn with hate and lust
you know for certain that those eyes,
that they will take what is free

as he crawls from the ceiling into the shadows,
his cloak takes a wild flare
and you see that his hands are not what they seem
that they are the things that scare

he rushes at you with inhuman speed
and you let loose a sudden scream
but he clamps down on your mouth with his hands of death
and you believe it is all a dream

but it becomes all the more real when he drinks your blood,
the nourishment that keeps him alive
and as the life flows from you to him,
it's clear to you what he'll contrive

he'll kill your family,
he'll murder your children
he'll take your next of kin
to his castle in lands far, far off
and take him there within

and he'll become like the monster himself,
in that castle built on screams
a man, no a monster,
that lives in the darkness
and drinks his fill of dreams

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  • 15 years ago

    by Ashley

    That was amazing. I love how i could use my imagination to get such a great image as i was reading. ur very good I must say =] 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I LOVE this...so many people who write about the vampire genre end up being totally cliche, but you pulled this piece of wonderfully.

    I love the imagery you painted in this piece, it creates such vivid visuals for the reader that it's like I can -see- everything that you are describing.

    Your flow is perfect throughout except in one stanza..

    "as you watch the eyes that crawl around,
    the eyes you can barely see
    the eyes that burn with hate and lust
    you know for certain that those eyes,
    that they belong to a he"

    ^^ I found the flow to be terribly off there.

    Apart from that though, you did great with this.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I loved it. The story was written extremely well, with excellent imagery. The second stanza was a bit off with the flow, but the rest was very easy to read. I love the concept of Dracula's castle being built of screams. That was original. Well done. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Hermosa

    I love the flow the rymes the topic, you did a great job 5/5