Comments : Conquering Moments

  • 12 years ago

    by Gem

    Tyburns are so hard, i tried one once and it sounds stupid, lol
    I like this one though
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was good, i like the wording, it was realy good.
    Tara-Kay
    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked the wording here, it had a very powerful effect to the overall piece.
    Again, imagery was beautifully done...elegantly written.

  • 12 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, wow, and again wow! So captivating, hard- to -forget type of poem, very deep and powerful, too. You're able to say so much in short pieces which is absolutely amazing. Simply breathtaking one.
    Keep writing, 5/5 from me

  • 12 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow I really like this a lot. I have no idea what a Tyburn is anyway lol. but this poem was very well written and it flowed nicely. keep on writing. 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 12 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    Tyburns are very complicated to do and i give you a lot of props for even trying lol. the words are extremely capivating and thats wat makes this piece a great one 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Even if it isn't, i wouldn't know :) and its still really good. short, but a very strong message. I really like your choice of words. they bring strong impact to the poem. I have yet to read more of your work :)

    Great Job

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Veamm

    Good!

    haha, same as your old ones. i don't what to say because im not familiar with this style..so ill just give rate for it!

    Keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    You write with such passion and plenty of meaning in it! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    It short but a good poem. I like the words you used in this piece, well done. The last line is great. well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by Pete

    I always have, and will always say that these type of poems are the best ones. Short and powerful poems stick in your head.
    Such a strong impact on the reader. You picked your words beautifully here, they definitely have the desired effect.

    "As I conquer, lucent moments hail"

    This last line is the killer one for me, finishes the poem off so powerfully with such a poignant sentence.

    Very nice work.
    [5/5]
    [Added to fave authors]

  • 11 years ago

    by Teria

    I wrote this style one time and haven't really tried it since. It's challenging, which I love. But, I hated the outcome of it. It's definitely not my favorite style of poetry. I will say though that yours isn't too bad. I liked how you brought it together at the end and the first 4 lines aren't that bad either. It's a lot better than the other ones I have read in this style.

    I don't like how these flow. But, line by line (separately) you have a good flow. It seems to have good meaning, which I also believe is hard to give out in these styles of poetry considering the lack of words. Of course, I'm sure a great poet could do it with ease. You've done a good job. It's not fantastic but that's only because I'm not all for this style I'll give you a 5/5 because if I liked this style then you'd most likely have an amazing poem here.