Now that is a very clever and uniquely written poem, its excellent well done xx keep it up xxx

Hey really like this, it is different to your normal style but i still love it, i love how simple the words and layout are and yet how so very complicated it makes the reader feel. :)

I like it. Heaps sad though.
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This is very different, but its an excellently written poem, sad, but goodly. Nice work, keep it up!

"infront" needs a space between it and in the last line, I think you might want to add "so" like you did in the earlier line, just my sugggestion though.

Wow, this was very different and might I had uniquely written as in the style and writing.

Usually I would glance first at a piece like this and think it will be a bit plain and not creative, that is my judging and I am trying to get rid of that. When I actually read this piece though, it was a wondeful display of your emotions. They way you wrote it was not repitive to the point where I would fall asleep, I don't really love love love repetition but it suited what your message was here, it really did. So although, how do I say this, although it wasn't like a graphic and containing many adjectives poem, it just struck me with a feeling, and it makes the reader feel lost with you and as someone stated above, complicated.

Well-expressed, I am glad I read this.

Oh, I know what I was going to say earlier, you used very simple words that surprised me and turned out to do a terrific job of describing your feelings and the scene to the reader. Well-laid out.

Take care and God bless you!

~MaryAnne