Comments : So Much To Offer

  • 16 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    This poem has definately inspired me. Thank you!
    SOme parts of this poem were flawed with hesitating rhythm and un rhyming words but other then a few small mishaps this was a very passion driven and well created poem.

    emah

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    "Seems I've been doing some thinking, of life's many ups and downs
    Countless tears that I've shed, and so many wasted frowns
    Many times I've criticized myself, hating the inner me
    All those painful days alone, yearning to be free"

    I think these lines were the greatest! They set the stage for such an amazing poem! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Miranda

    Amazing poem!Very inspiring and great chose of words.I will definatly be reading more of you poems.A well-deserved 5/5.
    Great work,
    Miranda

  • 16 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    This is a great piece, every lines rhymes so well, and filled with much thoughts. Honestly i like the entire piece. but i think i needs some kind of edgey words, well the word usage was great but i don't feel the feelings in it, so thats why.

    Keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel

    Great poem, its really deep, I love the way you describe things and the depth and meaning within your words. My favorite stanza was:

    Continuously beaten, always pushed down to the ground
    Yet I never fought back, never made a single sound
    Never believed in myself, heart left bruised and broken
    Left with a tattered soul, from the cruel words spoken

    (please return the favor I asked for on the discussion board, thanks a lot!)
    Rachel

  • 16 years ago

    by 4eversum1

    So motivating and well written. i absolutely loved it. perf. 5

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    The word choice was perfect elegant and strong, each kines holds so much depth, and sadly so much truth, your emotions are heartfelt, and sincere. 5/5 excellent job

  • 16 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    I LOVED this poem, ohh my God....You really poured your heart out in this one....I can relate so much to this and I felt your pain, it almost bought tears to my eyes =0(

    BRILLIANT...What more can I say!!!

    Love Sabrina

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Great job! It's totally awesome! Love the whole, "im moving on with my life" it's awesome. I love the motivation to not get down from what others say.
    Charisma*

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is an exellent poem, i really enjoyed reading such a wonderul piece of work. I think you have exellent talent. Will you please help give constructive critisism on my poem 'The bodys' rain' please. xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by CHRISTINE Rosas

    VERY GOOD AND TOUCHING!!
    HAVE TO THINK TWICE!

  • 16 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    Wounderful and amazing passion and relate-ability. ok i made that last word up, but the poem is a work of art and avery good read. thanx
    -Nz0

  • 16 years ago

    by Roxy

    This poem is amazing the rhyming was outstanding. I may noit have been in the same situation as you but I feel the exact same thing. I used to be so weak though now Im gained confidence in myself and iM happy ^^ much love from Roxy

  • 16 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    Good for you!!!!!
    Hope you follow through with showing everyone what you're made of!
    :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I really enjoyed reading this piece. Reading about people that over come all of these problems in their life to become such a better person is really inspiring. Anyway, other than your congratulations on that, another is also due on this poem. It's really well written.
    The flow is spot on, your vocab isn't that complex, yet uses a variety of words and the rhyming is good too. You wrapped this poem up very well, although I think the last line should rhyme, like the rest of the poem does.
    Only a minor thing.
    Truely excellent job though. I couldn't find a favourite part because it is all so good. Well done.

    5/5 :]

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by traceybilsbarrow

    Great poem real life
    experiences

  • 16 years ago

    by blue angel

    Very inspirational! i'm adding this to my favorites!

  • 16 years ago

    by TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

    Well, what can I say....It was simply beautiful!
    Okay, first let me say that this poem really moved me. It is as if it'd been written by me, I just relate so so much...Well, then, its good to know that Im not the only one who has gone through this, and well luckily I can say that now Im on the second part of your poem-with courage to put my foot down, to say what I want, what I think...And it feels so dam* good!
    Now turning to the poem, I personally believe it was wonderful, the use of words was really good and so was the rhyming. Thanks for sharing this brilliant piece of work.
    An overall 5/5 :)
    Keep writing!

    TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

  • 16 years ago

    by Julie

    Wonderfully well written..... liked the flow. Amazing Job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by StormyStar

    This was lenthy but not a waste of time! it was very cute! enjoyable and sometimes i have to force myself to read peoples poems but i didnt have to with this one! lol its very good! 5/5