A Sudden Bang

I like the poem, very short, quick to the point, no need to build up the mood. because a few lines in your already know whats going on through this girls head. i will say i have read a few of your poems, and i like it but i think the end could have used some bertter vocab. All your poems are quiet prolonged with such great wording and great mood setting, don't let one choice word ruin or belittle a great piece of art work. :-)

Simply perfect. You and I have a lot in common with our writing.
Thank you for your kind feedback on my own work.
Beautiful job, well worth a 5!

This reminds me of many of my early poems because i used to write about exactly the same thing! yours is probably a lot better than mine were but it was refreshing to read something like this and it's an effective poem.
please hold on in there because the good times will eventually come through for you.

Wow thats great u can rlly feel the pain i loved it 5/5 :]

Wow
exactly how i feel
the ending describes it perfectly
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