I Miss You

by MusoXDanielle   Oct 22, 2007


I miss you so much,
It makes me feel rough,
I miss your hug,
Making me feel loved.

I cry at night,
When everyone sleeps tight,
Nobody knows how i miss you so,
I wish you were here,
I feel so alone.

I love that we talk,
But its not the same,
I want to talk in person,
I know that now for certain.

I'll learn to walk like,
When i first learnt to talk,
And then i will see you again,
Then ill get rid of all my pain.

I know you're alone,
But so am I,
I miss you as much,
As i will ever miss you.

I stand forever,
My head held high,
One day ill reach the sky,
And ill have to miss you never.

Care and love,
All of the above,
I know ill always have,
You here for me,
My guardian dove.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Danielle

    Awww soooo cute i love it<33

  • 16 years ago

    by NORAH COLLINS

    Loved this poem brilliant xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    Really nicely written poem of sadness and loss. It's a shame the content is so despairing, I (like most people) am concentrating on the content rather than the writing ability.

    ~Content~
    Full of emotion and you are able to tell immediately that this piece is written straight from the heart, no pretention or misgivings about it. Such a sad story being portrayed, really forces the reader to connect to it, almost feeling guilty if they stop reading.

    ~The Poem~
    I love how vivid the imagery is in this and the last stanza is simply a show-stopper. Reasonably good use of rhyme throughout although the rhyme scheme seems to falter a touch in the 5th stanza.
    My main concern with this piece is the structure.. seems to knock the flow off the poem a little bit. You didn't really stick to any kind of structure with regards to the lines within a stanza.

    ~Overall~
    You definitely have very good writing ability, that shines through in abundance. I think it might be a good idea for you to attempt to write something in a set structure (Sonnet/Haiku/Licentia Rhyme <Some common ones).
    Definitely keep up the really imaginitive imagery - works very nicely.

    Any bad comment here, isn't intended to offend.

    A beautifully sad story, accentuated by wonderful imagery.

    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alicia Jane

    Omg this poem reminds me of what i do every nite, mhmm someone really special to me died, and its been years and year but i still stay up everynite crying my self to sleep tryin to figure out why and i talk to him and stuff sounds a bit odd but i do.
    mhmm i really like it
    =]
    nice work
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by A l y s s a

    Nice! This is a beautiful poem - the structure and wording was good. Keep it up :)

    Ally. x

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