The man of shattered soul

by twistedlover   Oct 24, 2007


The man of shattered soul
Walks around in loneliness
Knowing all the things he did
Are stuck inside his head

See kids learn from this
Or be stuck in lonliness
Take that *uckin road again
End up on the floor again

All the days he tried to keep up
Lose his love one day
Finally drove him
Crazy
See now he is dead
Slit his throat smashed his head
Wrote this note for me to read
And heres what it read

�I was never anygood at sitting down and explaining
cuz things to hard if I got my way
we�d all be happy, no more tears
baby I love u.
but things got worse u know
and that�s why im writing this note
so everyone can say
she�s the only love mmmmk
now ill say again
I don�t belive in this
Id try if I could u see
But after all this is love mmmk.�
*GUN SHOTS ARE HEARD

Mans voice talking*
That police report says this is a suicide
Ha that�s some bull right there
This was a murder
he was just torn apart before anyone could reach him�..

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  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous

    Um. ok. original I guess. kinda gettin there with the rythm, nice flow for the most part. In some parts it sounds like you were trying a little to hard to rhyme. other than that it was okay, nice twist at the end. 3/5 but A for effort.

  • 16 years ago

    by December

    Love the poem it is really good, nice flow to it keep it up I wanna read more!

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Aww....i love this so sad and heartbreaking....keep it up! :) 5/5

  • Even though this is a sad poem, I loved it. You should clean up the words a bit and it would look perfect.

    Keep it up!!!

    4/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

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