That was awesome also! Ratings don't mean anything so I won't rate your poems, you'll learn that they aren't as important or special as comments over time being on this site. Just a few language barriers I think. Need some more s's! But again the flow went well, it read good.

Hey, you have a really wonderful poem....i like it alot....
keep writting

This poem is cool and flowed great :)
the repetition of the line "Well deserved man" is very effective in the way of getting the point of the poem across and i luv the way you used it
5/5

I loved the bridging with the theme and variation approach. It really keeps the poetry focused as it defines so as to bring out what you really want to say.

Wow i love all your poems.I like reading them a lot.They cheer me up and help me understand things that i go through.

I enjoy reading your poems. I think you have a very unique style. Some of your poems make me think that maybe some people can relate to me. 5/5

Hey,
I enjoyed reading your poem, you have a nice way with words. the flow is once again good, I like that you repeat the title in every stanza, good work 5/5
kisses stephanie

You definately have a way with words,
excellent work yet again.
this poem is fantastic, very inspirational as well. keep it up =)

Beautiful, aww and love the wording and ryhmes where so good. I felt through this poem like you had inner peace so amazing. Very sweetly written!
Defently 5/5

Wow, I really loved thid one. It was full with emotion. Great job with this one. Going to my favs. 5/5

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This was just beautiful. It was filled with real emotion and amazing imagery. You truly painted a picture with your words. Well done, it was quite touching *5/5*

I really liked how you added well deserved man before each line, it added a lot of emphasis. great read

5/5

Okay. I liked this, BUT some of the English was used in the wrong context and that both disrupted your flow and also put me of the poem.

"And you might the one who keeps waiting in line"

^^And you might BE the one?

"You're looking for a closing door for very long"

^^That didn't really make sense to me. It came across as though you werre just trying to go with the rhyme scheme. maybe try something else?

"You seem don't know where your heart belong"

^^Seems you don't know where your heart belongs?" That seems to flow better to me.

"You're the most deserved man to have it all"

^^Deserving?

"And believe me through time you'll find the true"

^^Find the truth?

The other thing I didn't like was that you used so many fillers in this piece (You, but, and) by the end of the piece it felt like the poem consisted almost entirely of them. Try eliminating some of those and you'll find the flow to be so much smoother.

That being said, I enjoyed the emotion and depth you portrayed in this piece, it was beautifully done, and I absolutely adore the ending stanza, I found it to be very powerful and intense, and wrapped the piece up perfectly.

And again... great job!

Very good rhyming scheme and good descriptive words. Keep up the good work! XD

This is written in a great way.
Your descriptions are really good in the whole poem, and the piece is very deep and powerful.
I like the flawless flow that you created, it is equally good in every part of the poem.
My favorite stanza is:

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Well deserved man,
You've given your little heart from the very start
Keep waiting even though the day was too hard
You promised that the love won't ever be apart
You don't even care if it's about a broken heart-

You did good job with rhymes, too.
Keep writing!

Excellent!

The first thing that i notice on your piece is its simplicity, and words are not deep but it conveys much message on it. Every lines have balance of suffering and positive things. This write is great. Well done!!

Keep it up!

Yet another fine example of a greatly written peice of poetry by a good poet. I liked the repetition throughout the poem. Keep up the great work.

Peace, Joe