Maybe (love poem)

by jLegendc   Nov 2, 2007


Maybe I'm not really the
perfect guy for you,
I'm not the perfect choice,
The only thing I can offer
is this feeling I have for you,
I want you to hear out my voice,
The thud of my heart
that creates a rhythmic noise...

Maybe the time isn't right,
But I'm willing to fight,
Forgive me, I just coudn't
believe the beauty that stands out,
Your presence alone
erases all my doubts,
You're just someone
I can't live without...

Maybe I'm always writing about love,
Believe me, this is beyond my control,
Saying I love you isn't enough,
Yet there's just this feeling
that you can make me whole...

Maybe I sound as if love
isn't a big deal,
I say it without thinking,
I know how love made
you stumble,
So let me tell you something,
I'm not him who caused you trouble,
I'm just the one who can say
I love you without doubting...

Maybe love is tragic,
It can make you pathetic,
So why keep seeking it?
Because it can soothe
our souls like music,
And it is the closest
we have as magic...

Maybe I'm going fast with my I love you's,
Everytime I say that, it is true,
Even though I don't have a clue,
Of how you really feel about me,
Even if you can't answer it with a yes or no,
I'd still take any answer
even if it's just a maybe....

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  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    The rhyming was off for me. If your poems are going to rhyme then you need to have a proper rhyme scheme. A simple example would be ABAB (if you don't already know). Also I would say to make your stanzas all have the same amount of lines, either 4 or 5 or something like that. It just makes the poem look cleaner and it's easier to read.

    As for the rest of the poem, I thought it was really good. The whole message of the poem is something I'm sure a lot of people can relate to or at least understand.

    My favorite stanza is:

    "Maybe the time isn't right,
    But I'm willing to fight,
    Forgive me, I just coudn't
    believe the beauty that stands out,
    Your presence alone
    erases all my doubts,
    You're just someone
    I can't live without..."

    It just shows the amount of emotion you feel towards whoever you wrote this about. All in all it's a pretty strong poem but it just needs some formatting work and that's really it. Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by dhaxeeh

    Hi there, i reallt like your poem, i agree to you that love sometimes is a tragic and make you fool but hope you will you true love
    I vote it 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by dhaxeeh

    Really nice poem hope you make another one
    i vote it 5/5

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