Wow a depressing poem but looks arent everything nice poem 5/5 last stanza was my favorite, maybe u can read one of mine.

GREAT loved it all 5/5

Aww, this is a beautiful poem. Even though it's sad, it's beautiful. The flow and rhyming were just perfect. Great job. 5/5

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Awww, this poem is excellent. i love the way it flowed and it worded nicely. i can feel the hurt through it also. keep up the good work

Wow. amazing. [again]
sad but so. .wonderful at the same time.
i feel like this everyday.
i just want to. .run. forever. "/

again the flow was spectacular
and your words choice was flawless.

5/5.

Awwz what a sad poem!! :'-(
but it was nicely done!!!
it was short but full of emotion..keep up the great work!!

<3 i love you silly

Awwz what a sad poem!! :'-(
but it was nicely done!!!
it was short but full of emotion..keep up the great work!!

<3 i love you silly

Now this piece, I love, the structure, the word choice, the flow, its all good, really was hooked the first couple lines, beautifully written, well done.

Wow... that was amazing, the beginning of the poem really captivates her frantic heart. You can tell she's lost, she needs someone, and that really draws a reader in. You have so much talent. I can't tell you that enough. Every poem sends shivers, tears, or joy through me.

I don't know why you have Converse written in here instead of saying shoes, I mean yes it was a nice different word but sweetie unless you're in advertising, I don't think it's really needed ;)

First, your poem was really decent for somebody who probably has just started writing, it was short, and not awkward except maybe for the converse, but I am going to offer you a suggestion that will help take your writing to the next level, if you choose to take it.

IMagine poetry as though it was a song. Most songs, must tell a story, and doesn't poetry tell something among the words? First, with a song, as with a poem, you set the stage, take for example Kelly Clarkson's , "Because of you. She first explains how she feels with the lines, "Because of you I never stray too far from the sidewalk, because of you I learned to play on the safe side so I don't get hurt, because of you I FIND IT HARD TO TRUST NOT ONLY ME BUT EVERYONE AROUND ME, because of you I am afraid." Notice the part I put all in caps. This one line is later explained why she finds it hard to trust in the following lines, "I was so young, you should have known better than to lean on me." She explains how having to be there for people too much too young has altered her way of trusting everyone.

Now take Evanescence and their song, "My Imortal." Singer Amy Lee starts her story in a way with, "If you would just leave, I wish that you would just leave, cuz YOUR PRESENCE STILL LINGERS HERE, and it won't leave me alone." Now exactly why does this unknown presence linger? Because she follows it up with, "When you'd cry, I'd wipe away all of your tears, when you'd scream, I'd fight away all of your fears, I held your hand through all of these years, but you still have, all of me."

What I am trying to say is that with each art, song or poem, or even story, you have to not just explain one side of it. Why is this person left the way she is. Why is she running to the shore. What has made her who she is and shaped these events to happen? Hope you understand.

Excellent

For this one, I can feel the emptiness and sadness of every line, it was very well described and conveyed well too. It was simple and easy to understand.

Keep it up!
Veamm