I think this is the perfect write. So true the pride of virginity gets lost along the way. People will paint their own picture anyways. The opening lines were amazing. I believe even if you hadn't put the footnote that the majority of people would have understood the poem. Glad to see you posting again.
First off, the title was truly unique and evoked the desire in me to read more. I loved the beginning stanza, it painted a flawless image and the set the pace for what was to come. I think the repititon of the line, "-Twirl the flower to feel the thorn-" was quote effective in getting your message across. Your vocabulary was mesmerizing and meaningful. The poetic style you used was different, which made it refreshing to read because many use the same styles on this site. All in all it was a beautiful piece. *5/5*
Brilliant! My favorite line is -Twirl the flower to feel the thorn- it fits in perfectly and is not too much to use twice. Your sense of contradicting things to make a point is also brilliant. Not many could pull it off. 5/5 once again.
I'm impressed! This poem has truly effective atmosphere, you created endlessly creative rhythm and added some tone of originality in every line which made this poem so refreshing.
Very remarkable work, rhythm is simply intense and it kept my attention. You also did fantastic job with wording, it posses some simplicity but it is still superb.
Last line posses so powerful thought and it is really deep, I love it, amazing ending.
You expressed your emotions on a way that taken my breath away and I fount something truly impressing in the core of this piece.
Thanks for sharing cause I enjoyed in every word.
Just to bring your attention to it the end tid bit lacked question marks. Some questions you had down as statements when they weren't. Anyhow...It was unique. You write such strange poetry. I have not yet found one I haven't enjoyed and that is something. Yesterday I was yelled at because I kept giving this girl twos and threes on poems where she had solid fives. :/ Oh well. I just didn't like her poetry. Anyways. Very powerful poem and great use of metaphors. A five for you along with a rose. --,--;-(/@
Very unique in style and structure. i really thought it was great, it was intricate, laden with such a simple message, really. it's usually quite difficult for people to put any idea into such poetic, fluid words and make them stand out and still have them retain some sort of beauty and eloquence. truly a magnificent write
I like it, its like a dislocated thought finally brought into society where we can finally see what your beautiful mind has dished out. The use of words was blended perfect like a strawberry to a blender. how you erected it was masterful, you created an image into my head and a feeling punctured my spine. Good job. More like you did a yet another fantastic job.
I must say you have impressed me deeply with your vivid word choice here.
The topic was a good choice to write about and the meaning even better. I agree with you 100% it is a unique and rare thing which you only have once in your life, so why not cherish it.
The emotion you portrayed over the atmosphere was quite beautiful. Though this was a sad topic the beauty stunned me in more ways then one. I felt my heart beat with each line of your poem. Almost as if it was pausing for dramatic effect.
The flow was smoothe and I liked the rhythm, it was almost chant like. It had a unique beat to it which was calm yet intriguing.
Overall this is a flawless poem. Just from this your word has definitly caught my interest and I look forward to reading more from you over time. Well done. 5/5 from me. ~Mel