Devil Beside You

by Midnight Sun   Nov 25, 2007


*Ok I know it's long...but It's written for a contest and I'd REALLY appreciate feedback. Thank you! :)

We all have our demons
Living inside of us
We fight them every day
To earn other's trust

But what if that demon
Was visible to all
Always beside you
Standing proud and tall

And what if that demon
Had unusual power
More than the rest
Every good he devours

Yes what if the Devil
Took his place next to you
Would you fight him back
You know there's nothing to do

There is, sadly, no defense
And he knows where you sleep
He knows every thought
And there's no where safe to weep

Where can you go?
He is everywhere
Slowly choking out your freedom
You're running out of air.

This Devil has more power
Because your heart he has taken
He wears it proudly
While your soul is being shaken

You feel the wedding band
Restricting your actions
Every time he tightens his fist
It brings different reactions

This Devil is more evil
Than any other before
He holds your vow over your head
And declares a bloody war

How can the love of your life
Have misused your trust
To show no value for your breath
This punishment so unjust

Yes this Devil beside you
Is different than the rest
He has no heart...
This Devil is possessed.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    Good piece, and I liked the way the demon you spoke of was actually your husband. By far, my favorite stanza was the second one, because of it's rhyme, flow and power. I especially liked the 'But what if that demon', not sure why, perhaps it adds a real innocent, or ghostly feel to it. I also loved what was actually being said in this stanza (if it was actually a demon, and not a man), the idea of everyone being able to see your demon.

    Brad

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Loved it. It got a tad confusing, but i reread it and think i got the meaning better the second time. Good job!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    This is amazing, it deeply touched me cause I can relate to this great piece in so many ways. You wrote it excellently, with tones of deep darkness and fantastically created atmosphere. Your descriptions are very realistic yet so haunting. This is great dark poem from the beginning to the end.
    Keep up!5/5 from me

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