Very true poem. It was short and simple and full of emotion. I loved the second stanza, it made me feel like u were giving advice. Great poem! 5/5

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Thank you very much for taking the time to comment on my poem, I really appreciate the kind words and the fact that you wrote more than just a sentence. I am here to return the favour, but before I do this I need to repeat the personal disclaimer that comes with my name :P. I am here to give you my two cents, and as that is all these words are (just a simple opinion from another writer - not any more experienced than you or anyone else) I hope you won't take any of them offensive or too close to heart. This is your writing, and if you prefer it to be truly your own, feel free to ignore all of what is about to be said.
Well, the first thing I noticed was a good thing, and I want to save the good news until the end of the comment. :P... Soooo, the second thing I noticed was that you used the word 'happily' in every one of your stanzas. I figure there are three out comes to this. One: your readers will want you to use a thesaurus or your own mind, and come up with some different words that mean the same thing. To keep each thought crisp. (And I, personally, would rely on a thesaurus at a time like that. :P). Two: your reader isn't going to notice, but usually those readers aren't quite absorbing all the words as you, as a writer, would want them to. And three : your reader is going to like the repitition, but be confused as to why it's not following a pattern. Repitition works best when it has a solid pattern or some sort. Everybody, young and old, notices pattern. So anyway, when it all comes down to it, I'd say your best bet is to either grab that thesaurus and see if you can't find just one word (and change the 'happily' in your second stanza. - This way your repitition pattern, is that the end brings you back to the beginning with the word 'happiness'.). ORRR, you could write a whole 'nother stanza (personally I don't recommend this option. If you want to know why, send me a message and I'll get into that - but I think I'm blabbing enough right now as it is.). SO yes, if you want, write a whole 'nother stanza, and put the word 'happily' in your second sentence (which will make this your second stanza). This option allows you to actually follow the structure of repeating your key word in line 1 of stanza 1, line 2 of stanza 2, line 3 of stanza 3 and line 4 of stanza 4. *Hopefully this is all making sense.
This 'issue' is really not a big deal at all, however. Most people won't notice, and if they do, chances are they'll be quite taken aback by your words of wisdom ;). So as I say in the beginning, you can choose to do nothing. It would still be a good write.
...And now, the FIRST thing I noticed :P was that this was really like a word of advice for all your readers.
"When all else fails, black our everything, leave nothing."
I like that your giving your readers something to think about, and realize at that. It does, in a way, make this write seem like more of a thought or journal entry; however, your 'instructions' are put together nicely and somewhat structured. Your references were good. Your sentences had a unique strength to them. Well done, and keep at it. I want to see so many more from you. :)
Happy Writing.

Wow! You expressed emotions on absolutely fantastic way. Well done, I enjoyed in every line, very deep piece, choice of words is amazing too. I like your idea for whole poem and it is quite touching.
I also love atmosphere that you created, very captivating and creative. All in all excellent work.

This is such a hopeful poem... but in a way it makes me feel sad as well. I like the way you worded it, and the idea is interesting. Just let everything go. It's nice. 5/5

Wow.. what an excellent poem.. i love it.. i can really relate to it.. itz deep yet very interesting.. diz poem makes me sad cuz for me itz been alwayz hard to let go.. 5/5

Perfection...love your work

Beautiful piece of work. The whole poem was written Wonderfully and yet the words were powerful and as well emotional. Great meaning to it. Yet, it was interesting and enjoyable to read. 5/5

Take care,

Sarah A.