Comments : Don't Forget You're Mine [You promised me forever]

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I have stumbled on to a lot of great talent tonight. This poem reads like a heart song with the rhythm of a hit song

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Simply, a beautiful write.
    i liked the repetition of that last lines.
    and the title itself was amazing.
    the imagery and word usage was flawless.
    and the flow was great too.
    beautiful write. 5/5. :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemon Square Bear23

    Awww i Loved it!!!! ur such an amazing writter that was a very cute poem.. i loved it! ur really good, keep it up! 5/5 always

  • Very good. this was my best part....
    Tightening of the chest, never loved like this
    Baby, don't pour down rain on yourself
    Because you bring the sunshine right into my life
    Don't forget you're mine [you promised me forever]

    The tighten in your chest always is a good sign of love or falling in love with someone ;) Great work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by kla


  • 16 years ago

    by kla



  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    : D
    Brianna, I usually get down and dirty with poems. line by line. :], telling them how it's done.

    ohbby, that's not needed here.
    at all.

    You've done a wonderful job with your rhythm, emotion, and whatnot. It's flawless, no lie.

    I loved the cloudyskies && foggy eyes, stanza.
    along with the one following that and the ending.
    they were the best, i must say.

    Though the entire poem was amazing.


  • 16 years ago

    by haunted

    Very passionate. I absolutely loved it!!! Is it okay if this goes in my favorites?

  • 16 years ago

    by Soulful Ensemble

    I can relate to a poem like this one. I actually liked the title although it was a bit long. I also have long titles in mine.

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    VERY WELL DONE. I'm impressed this could come from someone as young as yourself. I look foward to your future works. I hope you continue.

  • 16 years ago

    by creeesta

    Very, very good job. :)
    i felt the passion ooze out of the sentences.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Wow this was just so beautiful. Each word you spoke was so easy for me to relate with. The repitition of the title after each stanza was effective and got your message across clearly. I feel like the third stanzas lines just reapeated itself and it kinda threw off the flow for me.

    "Weather forecast: Calls for cloudy skies && foggy eyes"
    ^that was original and I loved it!

    You're my drug && I'm addicted to your words"
    ^I could so relate with that!

    "Who needs to sleep? When your dreams have come true."
    ^this line was beautiful.

    I really enjoyed this piece. well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    Its not really structured the way i like poems and i usually get really bored and don't finish them, but this one i read all the way through!!! well done! its really good. i really like it

    Taegan Emily

  • 16 years ago

    by Fear2love

    Very sweet poem, and kinda

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    I loved this poem! There was so much love written into every line. So much emotion, and you conveyed your message perfectly. I loved the title and I loved how it was tied in to every stanza of them poem. It was so well done. And I loved the very ending, it summed up the whole thing so beautifully! Keep up the amazing work!

  • 16 years ago

    by PoeticMystery

    Wow i havent been on this site in a while && this is the 1st poem i read and its bombing. In other words, it was really good. I like it!


  • 16 years ago

    by moonlil

    Great poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I liked how you used symbolism for love, and I also liked the repitition. I think that you could have used a different title though, and thought up something that wasn't a line in the poem. Great work though. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Aimie

    AWW! i love this so much, the entire time i was reading it , it reminded me of my boyfriend hehe

    nice work
    5/5 :D:D
    well done hehe:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous

    That's one of the better poems I've read on this site. Originality, creativity, it was really good. I usually like poems that rhyme, but yours didn't need to, as it flowed well and was worded well.