Comments : Sensing The Emotion

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    The I have is a little too much
    but it still works
    it's not too overpowering
    the emotion was excellent
    flow was good
    vocab was good
    this poem was really nice
    I enjoyed it
    5/5
    kaila

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem is very well written. I like the choice of words and format, it delivers the contents and meaning in an outstanding way

  • 13 years ago

    by xXxDEADxXxINSIDExXx

    That is really beautiful

  • 13 years ago

    by Christina

    Very niice
    it had a niice flow to it! and idk lol but i rele liiked it!! keep it up!

    <3 i love you silly

  • Wow, not many people can pull of poems like this. The image I got from this fit just right and th flow was just perfect. Very great word usage. It was really good. 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 13 years ago

    by TracyM

    I liked it, it was interesting to read, and the word choice was vast and especially made the poem more interesting and enjoyable to read. Beautifully written, keep writing!

  • 13 years ago

    by Diabolic Atrocity

    Amazing poem, though I normally don't like poems that don't rhyme, this one is really something! I really like the pattern of the poem and love how it ended, such a great job! Rated it a 5 btw ^_^

  • 13 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    I REALLY LIKE!!!!! :D idk what to day, this is lovely. i mean excuse me for being this way, but i think i'm inlove...

    .. NO you idiot not with you, the poem

  • 13 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    An amazing poem .
    an attention grabber for me .
    from start to finish .
    the emotion here was greatly expressed .
    and very well captured .
    great write . 5/5 .

  • 13 years ago

    by ABake

    I loved the emotion first off. Your word choice and metaphors were out of this world. Lol. Umm, one thing that kind of bothered me was the "I have" it seemed to drag on after a while. Maybe that is because I am not one for repition but...

    My favorite stanza>>

    I am stuck in the endless webs of jealousy, the never-ending tangle
    I have been unwillingly clung to its silk and left to crumble
    I am stuck in the endless webs of resentment, the never-ending tangle
    Where I have felt the emotion, heard the emotion and seen the emotion
    ........For all I know the emotion is me
    But I. Am not. The emotion

    I loved it. The only thing, was the last line the periods in between words kind of threw me off, just minor though. Maybe you wanted it to be read with a pause or something. I am not sure. Also, you used "the never ending tangle" more than once in that stanza. I love the line but its kind of overplayed. Lol. But other than that an overall amazing peice. Great job!

    Amber :]]

  • 13 years ago

    by Soulful Ensemble

    I found that enjoyable to read. It was interesting.

  • 13 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow, i loved this. excellent job.

  • 13 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    I liked the repetition i think it added emotion and keep it going. It was a great poem and then when u reached the end it became an AWESOME poem :] very well done!
    Taegan Emily
    xx

  • 13 years ago

    by Alexander

    It is a well writen poem. The word choice was very vast and inthrailing. I liked the way it reels you in and at the end simply leaves you to wonder.

    I dont mean to sound like a critic, because by no means am i, but i think if you simply tried to make it ryme...if only just a little it would be spectacular.

    5/5
    Alexander

  • 13 years ago

    by SweetSuicide

    Loved it...5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by MyEscape

    Very profound piece. Shows you to be a strong-willed person. I really liked the way this 'emotion' drew you in, but you won't let it completely defeat you. It's a motivational piece. Good job!
    *ME*

  • 13 years ago

    by Caitie B

    Wow this is amazing the flow is veryy even i like it alot =]]