The Forsaken Prayer

by Poetic Ninja aka Papachopchop   Jan 4, 2008


Our father,
Who is in heaven,
Why did you forget my name?
From what I see,
I think you hate me,
On earth as it is in heaven.
Give me this day,
A little less dread,
And forgive my dark thoughts,
As I take me a few more shots.
Save me from lacerations,
And all my upheavals,
So I will not devour,
what soul I have left,
Amen.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Teria

    Wow.
    I actually liked this, at first I was like . . . hmm, The Lord's Prayer made into something sad/dark.

    But, I actually like how you did this, because you didn't make it all ... odd or anything. It was written flawlessly, with still the same need and desire for help as a prayer should have.
    The whole emotion with it was amazing and flawless.

    You've done a wonderful job here.
    xD
    Keep it up
    5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by FountainsOfBlood

    Wow... i can totally realate to this.
    this is amazing...wow..5/5 :D keep it up x

  • 18 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Wow, this is also great poem...
    Very touchful and I really impressed with this part

    And forgive my dark thoughts,
    As I take me a few more shots.
    Save me from lacerations,

    Well done!!! 5/5 for sure

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