Comments : Your all that i've got

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    That was so sad... No one ever should have to face those feelings and alas we do. Whether it be loss of a relationship, or loss of friends/family. Its painful to live through. This poem captured that message so well!

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    I know exactly how it feels but what a relief coz ive lost him for good..

    nice poem..5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by waiting 4 some1

    Just tell him straight "why are you acting wierd?" it's either he is betraying you or has certain reasons but you have the right to know.there is no guy that doesn't want his girl inside his home when he is alone

    it's a good poem, true feelings are insdie it

  • 16 years ago

    by Keith

    I see i have a fan :) and that poem was very good and it takes good writing discipline to keep every verse the same length.

    i read your profile and if there is more to be seen from you please do add :)

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    Very emotional piece! it was packed with good flow and rhyme and a strong message. It's sad to think someone isn't being faithful, and to not know for sure. I think sometimes a straight yes or no answer hurts less than not knowing at all. Good job!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    The flow of the whole piece is really good.
    Every stanza holds many emotions and it is written in a good way. It has some typical rhymes but all in all, greatly done!

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    This poem is great.. you did an excellent job writing down your emotions and making it flow flawlessly.. I guess I really enjoyed this poem because I can relate to each and every line... I actually have written a lot of poems based on the same exact thing but I deleted them from the site since ive moved on.. hope you do too.. don't let any guy treat you bad... excellent job letting it out though.. keep it up and thanks for the comment =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I enjoyed the flow of this poem nicely. It was well written and flowed smoothly which is the cause of a basic rhyme scheme. Your rhyme was typical and simple I think you could add a whole lost more to it if you used deeper words. The emotions written throughout this was beautifully sad however and boosted my thoughts on this poem up. Well done. Nice work. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I liked this poem a lot, and I think that a lot of people can relate to it, when they think a loved one is cheating on them. It was very easy to understand, so I think you could add in a metaphor or something to make it a bit more complex. I also liked how your rhyming didn't sound forced.
    The last stanza seemed to have a different flow than the others, maybe you could work on that?
    Nice poem,
    ~Ash

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    The first thing that hits me is how unbelievably crammed with emotion this piece is, it screams out at the reader .. forcing you to feel what the author is feeling. You did a very nice job portraying that.

    I really like the way that the first two stanzas are predominantly questions, I think it sets the scene nicely, really lets the reader see into the subjects state of mind.

    I felt that your flow was really steady, right up until the very last stanza - then it faltered a touch. With a few really minor adjustments, you could maintain the flow of the poem.

    You may find alot of people slate a rhyme scheme based on simple words, I really like that in a poem. So long as the sentence the word is contained in can maintain my interest. This poem definitely did.

    Overall a very nice piece of work that appeals to anyone that has felt uncertain about their partners monogamy. Such a sad piece, (for the most part) really well written.

    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by Erin

    Wow! I loved it!5/5 check out some of mine if you'd like

  • 16 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    This is a great poem it shows great emotion and feeling i love it your word choice and everything 5/5

    --emz--

  • 16 years ago

    by Hawaiizang3l

    I know how you feel love..or at least i did know how you feel now. Sucks lots...
    Very sad write...love the rhyming & the flow was good & constant! i like the last line lots, probably why you choose it as your title. :)

    Keep it up --n-- Take care!!