Just To Feel That Way

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Jan 20, 2008


I'd give anything in the world,
To feel that you love me.
It all seems impossible now,
Yet I cannot give up.

We were once very happy,
But now that happiness has gone away.
It seems like you can't stand me,
And it hurts my heart to feel that way.

I've always wondered what had happened,
Why you hate me so much.
Even after all the fights we've had,
Just know that I still love you.

You used to call me your favorite daughter,
Now they doesn't mean a thing.
I'd give up anything in this world,
For you to feel that way.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I dont really care of the love of my parents havent seen my dad in six years mom well i dont care, nice poem though i enjoyed how it slowly unraveled 4/5 plz do my latest two

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Very sad.
    "Now they doesn't mean a thing."
    should be
    "Now that doesn't mean a thing."

  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    The poem started off well, although you seemed lose track of the flow as you happened to extend the length of your lines. You present emotion in the typical "you and me" style poem structure - which is fine; but you must try and ensure that you don't disturb the rhythm, which eventually taints the reading quality of the poem.

    Also, I think you should re-read some of the sentences; you've made minor errors with the choice of words.

    Other than that, a well written piece. Good stuff. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    Aww i know what you mean with the whole dad thing. 5/5 !props!

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