My first,yet my worst.

by apoetwithnoheart   Jan 20, 2008


So young and so in love.
and we never suspected anything would go wrong.
for this romance would never last for long.
the tears suddenly started to fall.
i didn't stand so tall.
while you were lying to my face,the pieces of my tortured heart are scattered all over the place.
and soon you see i'm dying.
but still,you keep on denying.
oh,woe is me.
your love isn't there to see.
you were destined as my first.
but in the end you are the worst.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Mike Martin

    I liked it. It was honest and to the point. The flow was alittle off but all in all, it was very good...thanks for sharin...xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by apoetwithnoheart

    Oh,thanks.um,i don't intend on rhyming perfectly in my poems,i just go with whatever i feel.

  • 18 years ago

    by Alexander

    I very much injoyed your choice of words in this poem. The rhyming was a bit off in a few parts but it never did mess up the complete flow of the poem. Very nice piece and behind it is a very good message 5/5.

    Signed,
    Alexander

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