Comments : The Note! <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    WOW! That was so phenomenal. Beautifully written with so much emotion. At first I wasn't sure but I kept reading... and the end was just so sad. So powerful. You have talent girl! Keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    Wow
    this is great
    added it to my fav poems
    and i only have 2
    wicked job
    omg it was awesome
    plz stop me gushing now
    5/5
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by ItsYou ItsAlwaysBeenYou

    Wow this is an amazing poem. im definately teary eyed. keep it up you have skills at this.

  • 16 years ago

    by Angel

    It was awesome!!!
    great job !! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Still Slightly Broken

    Wow
    i was almost crying by the end
    so so sad
    but so so good
    wow

    keep up the great work

    kelsey xx

    p.s the thing about matt in your profile is so so cute and i know what you mean when you talk about the feelings you have for him .

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by halie

    Wow!
    dat is one of the lest poems ive eva read,
    i loved it!
    5/5
    wow, rlly rlly grest
    :p

  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    Absolutely amazing! is it based off of anything true? i hope not! anywho, beautiful poem

  • Wow, this poem was absolutely amazing. The feeling in this showed a lot and the flow was just right. I've never read poem so amazing as this. You did a great job! 5/5 <---wish I could give it more.

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    That was a really said poem. I actually liked how it didn't rhyme or go in a certain flow. I think it works for this poem. There were a few mistakes:

    and it wont go away
    ^^Wont should be won't.

    o how it feels so good, but
    ^^O should be oh.

    and thats all I need before I pass
    ^^Thats should be that's.

    and thats all I need before I pass
    ^^I'm not sure what that is suppose to say. Pass out maybe?

    and thats when I said
    ^^Thats should be that's.

    Great job!
    Cayce xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    Wow.
    You are an amazing writer.
    This made me tear up.
    I'm glad my dad isnt like that
    But i wish yours wasnt like that either.
    I hope your relationship with him becomes better.
    Much love
    Brittany

  • 16 years ago

    by DeViN sCoTt

    Dang that was AMAZING:)!!!!! I abselutly loved it!
    keep it up :)

    nanaz!

  • 15 years ago

    by jane

    Wow so emotional and sad but written well very good

  • 15 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Well, for starters, the poem was
    kind of a mess. Parts rhymed and
    others didn't. Now, I'm not a fan of
    free verse but to make the free verse
    more readable you could have made
    each line about the same sylables, that
    makes it more easier to read. You didn't
    really use your imagination with this,
    kinda of a cliche poem. YOu have a lot
    a grammar problems in here which
    didn't help either. Just keep trying you're
    only begining. I am just helping out.
    I perfer not to vote becuase I don't want to
    break you're 5.0 streak and I don't think this poem is 5.0.
    <3Tay
    Keep trying.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sora

    Wowww. this was a great piece. i loved every single word. im like totally speechless. wow it was beauitful yet sad. and you can really make your words come to life, i could almost picture it all in my head. fantastic! i loved this piece. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.