Winners, Monday August 06, 2012

Congratulations guys, well done for the HMs as well.
Thanks for the judges and their perfect cooperation this week!

note: One judge didn't send their comments yet, but the votes are in. Will add them once they are received.

Winter Dreaming
by Senryu 10+10

Scarlet Paints the Flower Bed
by BLBrown 4 + 10

Ravenousness
by Jennui 7+4

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I was/am Her
by Lovely Kissesz 10

Cimmerian
by Xanthe 10

Parchment On A Castle Wall
by Meme AKA Ms Rhyme 7

Thoughtful
by Britt 7

Life 7
by Everlasting

Divinity
by Karla 7

Sometimes a mind suffers poetry-ache
by The Poetess 4

E.T.A
by Chelsey 4

Snowy Owl
by Everlasting 4
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Comments
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Winter Dreaming
by Senryu

Your first stanza in this piece was so real to me, perfectly described what it feels like to breathe in the bitter cold of the winter.
The second stanza is what made me really fall in love with this piece.
"The white mountains that were crested in thin blankets of snow receded across the horizon- far north", that was just beautifully written, such a pretty image

Your third stanza's personification, "I wept a blizzard" made me realize this place is a winner. Absolutely loved this!

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Oh my, I could just feel the pain you expressed in this piece. It was flawlessly done. You use of imagery was a great touch because it made the reader come back with you to this place where the memories took root. Nice touch.

"I wept a blizzard that night when
you bid your harsh goodbye"
^Perfect. It went with the whole vibe of the poem nicely and captured the title as well. It is crazy how memories can just find themselves creeping back into our lives and taking us back to that moment, making us feel the emotions again. That was described perfectly here. Loved it.

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Scarlet Paints the Flower Bed
by BLBrown

This poem took my breath away. With elegant word usage and a flawless flow, this nature gem dazzled me from start to finish!

The title is like a piece of art within itself... very inviting and drew me in! I would like to highlight this stanza:

"Next 'tis waft of sweet perfume,
sun-coaxed flower, fragrant bloom.
Oh, now blossom, opened wide,
petal after petal rise."

This poem reminds me of a satiny, velvety flower garden. Rich with elegance, this poem has a soft feeling to it and flows beautifully..

I love this poem! The author is fairly new to the site so I say welcome aboard, and wow, you have a true elegance within this piece! Well Done BLBrown

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This poem was so beautiful. It was unique, a different type of wording for a nature poem. I loved the images. I thought you chose really simple rhymes, but the words around them made this piece a strong one. Well done!

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Ravenousness
by Jenni

This metaphoric poem was a pure delight!

It reminds me of a woman blushing, I could actually see the sweet innocesne within her as she is expressing how this person makes her feel.

"Whenever you nestle up against
your coffee cup and undress me
with your gaze, I melt at the notion
of you mending my far too often
bitten lips."

I adored the word usage and the use of biting her lips, gives me the feeling of her nervousness. Really adore this piece, and felt it deserved to be highlighted. Well Done Jenni

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Wow Jen, I was really surprised to see such a different write from you. I loved the first stanza and how you used undressing me with your gaze in a very sensual way.
Also loved this use of "delicate" when describing the snowflake.
I found this piece somewhat sexy if you really break it down and read it, you hid that very well and made it very poetic and not raw. Loved i

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Life
by Everlasting

This small and creative poem is only nine words. Within these nine words is a touching metaphor of life and birth a new.

I adore small poems that say so many messages within. I can see this poem on new birth of all Mother Nature's creatures.

"Cloud cries" <---- Beautiful...

The simplistic tone gave it such a rich touch to this piece. Well Done Everlasting

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Thoughtful
by Britt
7 points

It's simple bare bones love poetry like this that make you shine, Britt. The fact that you can write about something so literal and keep it impactful is beyond me, as I am more of a metaphor/imagery/whimsical/blahblahblah kind of poet.

This poem is a gem in my eyes. It really highlights your love for the subject in question. The use of someone else's poetry as the theme of a poem creates the most perfectly intimate dynamic.

This almost makes my cold, black heart believe in love. I can't see anyone not smiling after reading it.

Sometimes a mind suffers poetry-ache
by The Poetess

As always, Noura, your writing is the subject of much intrigue. I always find some surprising word choices or grammar in your work which makes it stand out in some way. That's why I love it so much!

I see so much color and vivid random thought put into this that makes me want to see the world through your eyes. Do you hold the fables ruby-colored lenses that artists are apt to see through?

I really enjoy your personification of Syria as a writer, like yourself. Bringing your country down to a personal level like that - a level where you and the land that you love can relate on is a very interesting device. Good job this week!

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Cimmerian
by Xanthe

Xanthe, I'm not sure when I first came across your work, but I must say it's delightful. There were many times that I found myself getting lost within the setting that you created for this piece. It's a very quiet but vivid poem and feels very soulful, truthful. What I like, too, is that your emotional writing is not above cleverness:

"my voice became
an antithesis of a
mockingbird's song.
Only then did I
realise the real
significance of
mocking. "

This part grabbed my attention like no other. Then there's the ending, that nice all emcompassing close by return. You made the fleeting image of snowflakes hold a mysterious importance, and it works great.

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Parchment On A Castle Wall by Meme AKA Ms Rhyme

I was really intrigued with the title and that is what drew me so quickly to this piece. The beginning was just great. I think we all have fears and hope that our next love will rid the inhibitions from our minds. Perfect opening. I like the first three stanzas are parted from the last three. It adds a nice transition. This poem told a tale of two lovers that are kept away from one another for some reason even though they long for one another. Beautifully told.

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E.T.A
by Chelsey

I'm thinking the title is the initials of the person you are writing about?

I could relate to this, so much. Your emotions were so raw here, so real, that I could just feel each word. You were so straight forward in this piece and I think that is what was so appealing to me. That moment of trying to forget someone that was once so important to you, I still struggle with that, and you expressed it here to a tee. Oh and the ending...perfect. It always comes back to that one person you will always miss...Great job!

Ms Sunshine
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Way to go Kite Runners! What a dual representation for two weeks in a row :D

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Congrats for all.
Lovely poems this week.

Thanks Ms Sunshine for your dedication :)

Congratulations winners and HM's!!!

Awesome Poetry :) Congrats!

Congrats winners and HMs:)

Thanks so much all of you, I am so happy to have won and feel honored to be on the front page with the other two winners!! :) :)

Congrats to you and t the H'Ms too :)

Thanks judges and Nana!

Congratulations winners. & hms.
Thanks judges & Nana

Thanks for the HM.

Why are there 6 10's scored this week?

Hellon so observant each week! I find one less 7, so it is likely a typo not a system error, as the system does not allow 6 of 10 when there are 4 of 7's and 5 of 4's. Perhaps the contest runner can identify which 10 is supposed to be a 7.

Congratulations to all the winners and HM's.

^ True, thanks! It was Mrs Rhyme's poem.
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Note: please if there are typo errors, send me a pm so that no body freaks out. I usually do leave a note if we encountered system or voting errors...So for less fuss, I would really appreciate pms.

Edited the contest post, votes are in correctly, if there's anything else that I cannot figure out myself, let me know XD <3

I find it easier with time differences etc to just post my questions in the forums.

Might be better to post questions in the forums anyway so we can post answers in the forums... clears things up for everyone, AND keeps your PM box from getting bombarded, Nana.

My thinking exactly Jane...I'm sure I'm not the only one as observant as LS gives me credit for so....if others see my question out here I assume they will await an answer here also..saves clogging up any of the pm boxes...right?

and...can I just tack my unanswered post/suggestion from last weeks winning thread...'

Well....wouldn't it be easier to ask Janis to stop the randomization of the nominated poems? Even if it's only over the weekend while the judges do their voting.

Well I don't always come back and read what you guys post, that's my whole point from pms, especially if a typo, this week if Anna didn't send me pm about hellons post, I wouldn't have known that I missed typed a vote.

as for:

Well....wouldn't it be easier to ask Janis to stop the randomization of the nominated poems? Even if it's only over the weekend while the judges do their voting.
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not sure if you are referring to the vote this week or just in general, because the judges had their votes right, but I don't copy paste the votes, I reorganize them, so I missed the right number.

I think she means in general. We keep being told things are always messed up due to judges misvoting with the randomization of poems.

Yap that's what I got, just clearing that this time it was not a misvoting :]

Janis should fix the randomization of the nominations page. If only he'd come back around...

It'd be nice if it would just list them as the poems get nominated.. so poem a, b, c and when refreshing it will stay a, b, c, not b, c, a...

I hope that made sense.

Yes, originally the random order was to prevent there being the impression that one poem "outranked" another.

However, a static order not based on votes would make better sense. Even an alphabetic listing would help matters.

One more item on the to-do list for Janis.

Well I don't always come back and read what you guys post, that's my whole point from pms, especially if a typo, this week if Anna didn't send me pm about hellons post, I wouldn't have known that I missed typed a vote

As the host...shouldn't you come back from time to time to check what we are saying?
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Perhaps a pm could be sent to current/future and stand in judges to refresh them on the fact that....for the moment anyway...the nominations page is still randomising poems and just to double check that they are voting for the poem of their choice each week?

Yes, Hellon, that warning is sent to them, along with the warning about how easy it is to accidentally cast a vote on a cell phone while scrolling.