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1) Each poet may only submit one poem per person, those who submitted twice would be disqualified on the spot. No hesitation.

2) The poem has to be written in perfect English, no abbreviations (Example: U tore mah heart n 2), those poems written like so would disqualified the poet on the spot. No hesitation.

3) The poem has to rhyme. This contest would be judged by no other than me and I favour poems that rhymes.

4) The poem has to be submitted by the orginal poet, those found to be plagiaristics would be reported and of course disqualified on the spot.

5) The poem can not be any longer than forty lines, meaning if you posted a poem with forty-one lines, your poem and you would be disqualified on the spot.

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Contest winners would be listed in an orderly fashion 1st, 2nd, 3rd and so on depending on the number of participants.

First place winner would get a reserved spot on my favourite's list.

Second place winner would get three poems comments and ratings from me.

Third place winner would get one poem commented and rated by me.

The rest listed would not get a prize.

They would only be merely listed as a participant in this formal poetry contest.

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When you reach the period in this sentence, you have agree to these rules and will follow them.

Enjoy the contest.

Dealine is on November first.

Anyone posting after the deadline would be ignored completely.

P.S A really great way to catch my attention is an excellent ending, keep that in mind.

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ok atomic! YAY!!! This one is called "Suicidal Friend":

How do you say goodbye,
When you've only said hello?
When the one you love is gone,
Your emotions get so low.

The pain of the world,
Bearing down on your back.
Is nothing to the pain,
Inside your heart so black.

Words of sympathy
Are never good enough
When your road is long,
And your road is getting tough.

Loss is always hard,
When no one understands,
It ruins your surprises,
It messes up your plans.

Smiles turn to frowns,
Frowns that lead to tears,
Tears that cause depression,
Made worse by lonely fears.

Suicidal thoughts
That are threatening to rise,
The truth still remains,
You can stop your own demise.

Never seeing what is good,
Exaggerating the bad,
Leaving back your happy,
Harvesting the sad.

Living all alone,
Angry at this world so fake,
If this is how you choose to live,
Then this is your mistake to make...

I can no longer deal with
All your talk about the end.
I can no longer deal with you,
My suicidal friend...

Thank you! ^_^

~Anthony

I want to write a poem,
About everything I feel
But I dont even understand
What is right and real.

Its hard to portray your emotion on paper
Its your feelings that you keep inside
No one truly understands anyway
Why a thousand tears at night youve cried

Not even knowing the reason,
Behind all the lonely tears
Why they stain your face so coldly
And exaggerate your fears.

My words are spoken about my thoughts
But broken down by you
You cant begin to understand
Unless youve been though it too.

Im sorry, Im not what u want me to be
But I want to be true to my own
How can I come out with my feelings?
I guess they arent meant to be shown.

If u lie to yourself enough,
The lies will eventually seem true
Im lying to my true feelings
Hiding all my secrets from you

Am I imperfect?
Are my thoughts so impure?
Is it so hard to believe these feelings
Im having arent so obscure?

Dont tell me how Im suppose to feel
I can figure it out on my own
Dont tell me Im wrong for what I want
When to you it is unknown.

If u dont like the choices Ive made
Dont tell me how wrong I am
I can love a girl if I want to,
Cause really, I dont give a damn!

I want to write a poem,
About everything I feel
But you wouldnt understand anyway
Cause to you my feelings arent real.

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My poem is titled "out of the closet" ... hope u enjoy! - Falling

Lover's Deception..

I am the temptation,
burrowing under skin of the weak.
I'm the hesitation,
daring the tempted to follow me.
I am the foundation,
strengthened by the blanket of deceit.
I'm the revelation,
trust in me, for its my grace you seek.
I'm the lack of feeling,
numb your nerves so you don't feel whats near.
absence of everything,
you follow as I slowly appear.
Just open up to me,
let us begin to strengthen our bond.
Unconditionally -
I'm here, while everyone else is gone.
I will fulfill your needs,
giving a glimpse of eternal rest.
while robbing you of sleep,
I'll force upon you my hand of death.

Fading by day
too quickly taken away
robbed and misused
this gift of youth
innocent forced by society
to deal with harsh reality
following examples shown
baby's acting grown
just wasting time
looking for something they wont find
taking chances, pushing limits
luck runs out in a matter of minutes
unprepared for the what's ahead
so many of them end up dead
everyday, the price they pay
going out of their way
to be accepted for something their not
it ain't worth what I got
this gift god gave
innocence I must save

A New Day

A white glowing orb
lights up the darkened night
shooting stars twinkle
bats start to take flight

Trees rustle softly
squirrels lay down to rest
mice scurry to their homes
wolves head out on a quest

Grass blows with the wind
flowers close silken petals
rivers gurgle satisfied
nothing polluted with man made metal

Mountains loom in the distance
accented by the painted sky
colors flourish everywhere
as the sun begins to rise

hope you like it :P

This poem is naturally longer...but I went ahead and revised it so it would meet the 40 line rule. Lucky, it's exactly 40 lines. It is, in my opinion, one of the best rhyming ones I have..hope you enjoy. -DarkSuicide
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Feeling What They May ---

Now my children,
I'm going to tell you a tale,
Of pain and suffering,
Where everyone fails.
There are no hero's;
No knights to save the day,
There is no more light,
To show you the way.
I'll tell you of a tale,
Now filled with blood;
Once was sweet;
I'll tell you of love.

This love of theirs,
Will tear them apart,
Leave them there,
To pick up their hearts.
Bu alas,
Things soon failed,
And they hid their hearts,
Behind a broken viel.
Things didn't go right,
As they had told them before,
They weren't right together,
They were now sure.

So the boy and girl,
Lonely and lost,
Left each other,
A a most precious cost.
Letting themselves go,
To poison and blade,
They disappeared,
Going where they bade.
But they soon found;
I must say I fear,
They couldn't live in life or death,
Without the other near.
Their souls soon linked,
Together as they may,
Boy and girl,
Feeling what they may.

Ode to Autumn
by HansRik

The fresh autumnal breeze caress'th my cheek,
the joy this brings I can no longer seek
in Summer beauty or the Spring's "love" trick.

The cloudy sky does shine and makes birds sing,
my ears taste their sweetest romancing.
Forever will their composition ring.

The flowers sigh their natural perfumes,
and gently as ever they have stopped to bloom.
My nose, thus hopes, their last breaths to consume.

The leaves are bound to lose their green pigments,
and soon the flowers too, will lose their scent.
But lo! Nature's beauty will never end.

A drop of heaven
by Kristi Hancock

A drop of heaven
Which fell from the sky
Caught my view
And fell into my eye

I felt the tiny peice
Make everything I could see
Into something else
That wasn't reality

I could see the truth
The lies
I could find imagination's youth
And it made me suprised

That peice of heaven
Soothed my aching,breaking heart
And now that I've had it
I don't know where to start

It's made me stronger
And I can always look back
But it makes me move forward
Judgement I lack

As I breathe
I feel the wind
And I'm soaring high
Nothing behind

The drop of heaven
Made my faith heal
And now I know
My life is real

Darkness surrounds with pastel glow
Time moves forward though much to slow
Light as a feather you search for the floor
Pray for the wind to blow no more

Floating about with no control
Never to find another soul
Never to know whats to come
Unknown and fearful oh so numb

Feelings are gone and all's a blur
Speech and thoughts such a slur
As though nothing else exists
Sight is darkened into the abyss

You'll find no one here
But death is so near
Though nothing to fear
Possessing but one tear

Lost in a forgotten world to cope
Left without a thought of hope
Don't forget the past, or present
Your mind is open to every serpent

Nothing is hidden your an open wound
Bleeding continues feelings not attuned
Searching for what you do not know
Flying past with the winds blow

Searching...
But aching
Searching....
Not breathing
Searching....
But losing.

YEAH! No one said anything about no explicit poems, so here I go!
For my beloved Brittany
by SexMeister69

Girls I can get, many,
But I only want the best, Brittany.

How lovely she is, I cannot tell,
but my life without her is hell.

I want to hold her tight,
all day and all night.

I want to kiss her lips, her breast,
Her clitoris and all the rest.

I dream we copulate,
I feel as if drugged with an opiate.

Oh my dear Brit,
I want to click your clit.

Oh, kiss my penis, make it erect,
I want to feel your nipples, too, erect.

Taste my semen,
Love me, like you can't love other men.

Oh, Brittany, love me.
Make me joyous, oui!

I'm here for you.
I want you.

Summer Night

Every night, I close my eyes,
I imagine crystal stars,
When your shining eyes meet mine,
Just a glimpse makes me fly.

While my soul touches thin sand,
White moonlight caresses my skin,
You silently take my hand,
I adore you and the cool wind.

The sound of ripples of the sea,
Promises and endless sleep,
Sings the whispers that we keep,
Now our heaven is so clear.

The taste of your love,
Is as sweet as I'd hope,
Your angel kisses I desire,
Just the thought takes me higher.

The scent of the night is wet,
A perfect breath from you I get,
I can't avoid to follow your smell,
It's too late, I've already fell.

At midnight, I'm awake,
Realize that all was fake,
So I calmly pray and wait,
For that summer night I crave.

What is Christmas?

Someone asked me today what Christmas was,
and I thought about it long and hard.
Where abouts could I possibly start,
with the reindeer in the front yard?

Should I start with Santa Clause,
his red suit, and his mighty sleigh?
Or should I start with the baby Jesus,
after all it is his birthday.

Should I start with all the Christmas Carols,
that people know by heart?
Or should I start with the presents under the tree,
that children eagerly rip apart?

How about the mighty reindeer,
especially the one with the red nose.
Or should I begin with the special feeling,
that children get when it snows?

Or what about the elves,
in the workshop way up North.
Or how the children go to sleep early,
as not to scare Santa when he comes forth.

I though of all the possibilities,
the wrapping paper, shopping, and trees,
the long and short Christmas lists,
stuffed turkey, and classic movies.

When suddenly it hit me,
the true meaning behind the day.
It's to love the people around you,
no matter what they do or say.

The day is about forgiveness,
to celebrate the birth of the son,
to love the people around you,
with the scent of apples and cinnamon.

So when I was finished my story,
a smile lit up her face,
and I could tell she understood,
about the culture I embrace.

False Hope
By: Amanda Bee

Why do I keep on deluding myself?
And why can’t I release this illusion?
For I know there will be no happy ever after
No heartwarming and fuzzy conclusion

No slow descent into an evening sunset
With fingers intimately intertwined
No romantic candle lit dinners
Served with crystal goblets of wine

I’ll find no roses strewn across my pillow
No softly whispered words of affection
No heart stopping gestures of romance
No days filled of timeless perfection

I’m sure Sleeping Beauty is wide awake now
And she’s probably crying on Cinderella’s shoulder
Weeping that Prince Charming broke her poor heart
As soon as the days of their honeymoon were over

Forget about a grand act of dedication
Or a declaration of tender sweet devotion
Oh how I wish that my head hadn’t been filled
With such an impossible and unattainable notion

Of a love that could endure until the end of time
Everlasting love, hmph…I scoff at thee
You continuously make fools out of the innocent masses
And now I’m begging you to set my heart free

Depart from the crevices of my throbbing brain
These promises of passion have left my mind tainted
Admit to your falsehoods and take away all
These whimsical pictures that you’ve meticulously painted

Disillusioned and utterly heartbroken
Teardrops tumble as I strive to cope
Holding up my chin through this sad reality
Determined to stop desperately clinging to false hope

My Greatest Fear

Waking up so early in the morning,
From four short hours of sleep.
That dream, i dreamt of you again
it made me weak and weep
It always starts so perfect,
I love you and you love me.
A bond so strong and yet,
It seems to break free
You start to get distant
And than you sneak away
the cheatin thoughts of you
run through my head day by day
My world was stolen
my heart was breaking
but my love had remained
yours for the taking
I knew I wasn't good enough
I always knew you deserved more
but in this dream i felt the pain
as you walked out the door...

I know this dream
is only a thought
But without you my love
i would forever be lost
For it started out simply
that i was afraid to fall
I didn't want to love you
but your my greatest love of all
Ever so frightened
that things won't work out
And I fight back tears
when there's signs of doubt
I know you love me
but I'm still scared to loose
all of these fears
are all because of you...

Copyright(C) 2005 All Rights Reserved

“Secret Feelings”

How happy I am when your around,
You make me feel so great,
There's always fun to be found,
I wish that we could date,

Your beautiful to me in every way,
It's just to hard to explain,
I want to be with you everyday,
Without you I'm not the same,

Your smile and laugh I love the most,
You make me all warm inside,
Just being around you, I want to boast,
And love with you I'll find,

I know that this might be to fast,
But feelings are flying high,
I'd love to make things between us last,
My feelings for you I can't lie,

I don't know what you think of me,
But I hope you feel that same,
Because in my life it's you I see,
I love just saying your name,

My heart is crazy and just not right,
I need you to help mend,
I want to hold you oh so tight,
I want you more than a friend,

Tell me exactly how you feel,
And what you think of this,
To me this is such a big deal,
You I never want to miss

Angel

Masking weakness in human clay.
Breaking the pressure that built the day.
Stretching to the sky but falling to the deep,
I've lost control of all I keep.

And I fall to my knees in desperate plea,
As blood stains my soul in this decree,
The stitches bind wings onto my back,
Colour like death, as dark as black.

Seeking the day in the darkness of night,
I played the game that lost my sight.
The pressure is building as my skin erodes,
My skeleton in waking, the dawn has rose.

And I fall to my knees in desperate plea,
As blood stains my soul in this decree,
The stitches bind wings onto my back,
Colour like death, as dark as black.

In the morning my face is revealed,
Breaking to pieces and never healed.
I'm not in heaven, I'm an angel to deceive,
I'm the angel of the devil this eve.

The wings carve my back into this dreadful sight,
Preying on the weak in the darkness of night.

So good so far.

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A LONELY LIFE

Have you ever thought about
how lonely life would be
if we had never met
if there were no you and me?

We'd have never known the laughter
and the secrets that we share
or just the joy of holding hands
knowing someone cares.

We'd miss all the special times
soft music and candle light
the feel of our bodies close together
holding each other all night.

We'd not have felt this love inside
that's captured both our hearts
or the longing that we feel
when we must be apart.

Yes, it would be a lonely life
to live without your kiss
never see your gorgeous eyes
just think of all we'd miss.

Let Me hold You....

Let me hold you one more time before you go to sleep,
Let me rock and tuck you in gently while i tell you of little Bo Peep.

Let me twirl your golden brown curls,
While you get hypnotized in your own little world.

Let me love and embrace you from the day,
nothing could ever get in the way.

Let me have just another moment to rub your ears, count your fingers and toes,
I won't ever let this moment go.

My heart was blessed with wings to wrap around your tiny little soul,
Mommy will be here waiting for her turn up to heaven is where you go.

Now I play patty cake to the sky,
I pretend the stars looking down at me are your eyes.

The cool breeze is you soft touch,
Oh my dear little one how I Love You so much.

The warm sun is your bright smile,
I can still hear the echo of your giggles for miles.

The moon is how you say I LOVE YOU and kiss me goodnight,
I gaze at the stars one last time before i turn out the light.

Its time your rest and go to sleep, mommy just wanted to hold you one last time before you count your sheep.

5/30/05

(this poem is of a mothers lost)
Christina Chavez© Copyright 2005

This Lullaby...

Hush little darling,
don't say a word,
mommy's giving you her blessing knife,
I want it to sit upon your grave,
After it takes your life.

Hush little darling,
don't shed a tear,
mommy's going to
guide you through your life,
to join me in the afterlife,
show me your refusing light.

Hush little darling,
don't run away,
mommy wants to show you another way,
you don't have to go without my love,
we can be together if you follow my will.

Hush little darling,
please don't scream,
mommy's going to give you one last say,
please let me take you easily,
cradled in my arms spiritually.

Hush little darling,
close your eyes,
mommy's going to give you an alibi,
please let it take you up to me,
i am waiting for your soul to rise.

Hush little darling,
Come back home,
I'm too lonely way up here,
please come back with my blessing knife,
if you wont follow me to your doom.

End of poetry contest. I shall post the results shortly.

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Okay, I’m sure everyone was waiting for this exact moment. And the winners of the “Atomic Poetry Contest” are:

1st ~JHarrison wrote “Wooden Horse”- I must admit at first glance, the poem didn’t look that interesting, but s I read the poem, things started to make sense and I absolutely heart how you ended this particular poem. Well done, and very nice message.

2nd ~Amanda Bee wrote “False Hope”- This poem have given us all a look at what love really is and our ignorance that it’ll never end. Well done M’Dear. I really enjoyed.

3rd ~Hayley J wrote “What is Christmas?” - This poem is truly amazing and I heart the way it rhymed without repeating itself much. In the first stanza you mention about the reindeer, and you repeated it again in stanza four. Though it kinda repeated itself, you somehow made it work, very nice.

4th ~HansRik wrote “Ode to Autumn” -The imagery used in this poem was very nice, I can actually paint a picture in my mind from this poem and I can’t say that it’s a terrible painting.

5th ~Your Fool wrote “Untitled”- I really have nothing bad to say of this one, it was very good and you didn’t repeat yourself much. The ending was amazing.

6th ~NightTears wrote “Repetition of Mixed Emotions”- Such a short poem with so much emotions. I am very impressed with this work. The last two lines of each stanzas were always my anticipation to read.

7th ~Gabriela wrote “Summer Night”- The title isn’t very original, but that can’t say much for the poem. The imagery is very good in this one too, the last stanza and its last line were simply well written.

8th ~Falling Up wrote “Out of the Closet”- Though you violated rule number two, I will ignore the small abbreviations like “u” for “you”. At least you didn’t type like you were retarded or something. I like your poem, it had captured my attention from the first line to last. I like the second stanza most. Way to go.

9th ~JL wrote “A New Day”- I absolutely adore the imagery in this one. I usually don’t like poems about nature and such, but this one and very well written.

10th ~Loving _A _Lie wrote “Suicidal Friend”- Your topic was a bit cliché, but I like the rhyme in this one and how you chose to end it. Endings, to me is very important in a poem. Stanza eight was my favourite.

11th ~Fiery Feline wrote “This Lullaby” -Unique topic. The rhyming was a bit off and I think you added one line too many to each stanza. Because you took the general idea of a lullaby, you know the song...”hush little baby, don’t say a word…” I read it with the rhythm already provided and it didn’t sound as nice. Again, wonderful topic M’Dear.

12th ~Juicy Secret wrote “Let Me Hold You…” -I absolutely heart the topic you chose to write off, and I heart how you compared the objects in this poem, but the rhymes seemed too forced in each and everyone of the stanzas. Sometimes I had to read twice just to make it seemed as though it rhymed.

13th ~xDarkSuicidex wrote “Feeling What They May”- The details in this one was good, but it wasn’t great. I like how it started, but it got kinda sloppy towards the end.

14th ~Broken Misery wrote “Angel”-Your repeated a stanza twice, is this a song then? The descriptions in this poem was very good, and I think my favourite line out of the whole poem was “Colour like death, as dark as black”.

15th~Drew Gold wrote “Deception”- This is a very good poem, but something seems to be missing, I can’t place a finger on it though . I especially like your last two lines, I think those two were the most creative in the whole poem.

16th ~Tammy wrote “A Lonely Life”-I personally think you can do better with the title, it’s a bit cliché and also the topic. The rhythm was a bit off, but the descriptions weren’t bad.

17th ~Adam Detzner wrote “Untitled” - This poem threw me off a few times, and the rhymes weren’t that good. I like the whole idea behind your words though.

18th ~Love Fallacy wrote “Secret Feelings”- Let me start by pointing out that you kept writing “your” for “you’re”, but that was just some minor mistakes. Your stanza always started out so fine, but then when you get to the last line of each, it gets really weak, as though you’re forcing the rhyme.

19th ~Just Rain wrote “A drop of Heaven”-You repeated yourself a lot in this poem. Using a very cliché saying “A ____of Heaven” And I quite positive you spelt “piece” wrong. The ending was a bit shaky, I think you can do better.

20th ~Steph wrote “My Greatest Fear”- I think this poem was a bit cliché, and the rhyming scheme weren’t that good. However, I do like some part of it and the meaning behind the poem, though it is a very common topic.

21st ~JJ wrote “Untitled”- I like rhyming poems, but not ones that rhymes like this one “Cat, hat” I like “Dog, Cat, Log, Hat” Get what I’m saying? I really like the whole meaning behind this poem, but the structure was a bit off.

22nd ~SexMeister69 wrote “For my beloved Brittany”- This poem has a name in it and that kinda threw off the whole poem. When you want to write such an erotic poem, don’t make it so obvious that you’re having sex. I’m positive I’ve told you before to be more discreet about it.

Congratulations to Jharrison, Amanda Bee, and Hayley J. You have won the prizes I have listed before.

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Yea 2nd place!!! Woopee! Great contest Atomic. And yes, JHarrison's poem, "Wooden Horse" is terrific! Congratulations J!!!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH! "1111oneoneone"? HAHAHAHAHA! Nice.

Ahem.

I apologize M'Lovely, though we are indeed best of friends, you are here and now, disqualified.

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I would, but the issue concerning my internet access is in the way.

But thanks for the compliments the same.

As for the '!!!!1111oneoneone"

I understand it, it was funny, but took me a second glance to get. =)

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eh, 11th isn't too bad. =)