Poetry Contest

Rules:
1. It has to be your own
2. You can only have one poem
3. No explicit poems
4. Have funn =)

DEADLINE: JANUARY 7, 2005.
(before school starts;P lol)

1st Place: 10 comments and 10 votes
2nd Place: 7 comments and 7 votes
3rd Place: 5 comments and 5 votes

Everyone who enters I will comment 1 poem and vote for 1 poem =)

--emotionless19*

YaY! im first!!! good luck to everyone!!!

Reflection

Death defieing shadows...
caught me so soon...
i looked in the mirror...
and saw my doom...

shocked by what i saw...
not surprised i wouldnt be missed...
poisoned by the devils...
life sucking toxic kiss...

right then my heart stoped...
and i felt shadows depths...
creeping in the mirror...
saying, "its time for your death."...

in the mirror i saw myself...
with a look of sadness upon my face...
tearz running down...
not a safe place i could stay...

i didnt know what to do...
my mind rambling with thoughts...
i knew if i ran sooner or later...
i'd be caught...

Just one simple wish,
The wish for loves eternal bliss.
For my lonely soul to be complete,
When you fill in that missing piece.

To burn the flame of true love's fire
To fullfill,discretely, inner most desires.
To make unbroken the scars of my heart,
When with just your name, you leave your mark.

Bring back my reason to out live the moon
Grant me the wish that you'll be with me soon.
To fix the shattered shell I am,
To heal with love as best you can.

Turn to reality, the dream that I see.
Where I'm with you, and your with me.
The day you plant your lips for a kiss.
You will grant this one simple wish.

Fantasy Angel

The dark has fallen,
As i lay amongst the stars.
Reminiscing this life,
Across the ocean afar.

Then came a silhouette,
Dancing towards me.
With such adoring grace,
I couldn't help but see.

Moving her body,
To the mastered beat.
An angel so flawless,
Holds perfection complete.

Her eyes so exquisite,
Filled with innocence and bliss.
Igniting my senses,
For such beauty I cannot miss.

Her resplendent silky hair,
Tracing along my cheek.
Yearning for her gentle touch,
My heart rapidly beats.

Her laughter so sweet,
Engraving a passionate smile.
For a gentle buss,
I'd go through any miles.

My hands reach out,
As they try to hold her.
But so swiftly she moves,
Teasing my attempts mere.

Then the first rays of aurora,
Shinning against the poudrin land.
As my angel stopped dancing,
And slowly let out her hand.

I kissed it,
For the worst i feared.
She began to move back,
As i saw crystal tears.

Slowly my angel,
Rose up and ceased.
The beautiful innocence,
I knew i would miss.

But do not shed tears,
For this you should deem.
Again we will soon meet,
In my fantasy dream.

How my fingers tremble
by Just Rain

How my fingers tremble
As I summon up these words
That no one else can see
And can't always be heard
How the world seems to go mute
As I double every key
On the locks of my thoughts,one for you, one for me
How I feel in the pit of my heart
That one day everything will go right
Oh, it drives me crazy
To know I'm falling to my plight
And yet I keep writing
When I am at school
And then at home start typing
Not following the rules
Because the gift that these poems grant unto me
Is the gift to feel what no one can see
And splash it onto paper where others can read
And for once smile when I hear good things
About my unique poetry
For once I can be who I want
I don't have to move about
I just need some paper and a pen
No need to even shout

If I feel like a shadow
I can run to here
Where whatever I see makes me move slow
For I am what they fear

If only my friendships
Had been kept forever as I wished
And not departed
They are the ones I mostly miss

Sometimes if I'm in a good mood
Funny stuff will definitely make me laugh
The jokes,the puns,the giggles
If only my own humor could I match

If I could write my entire life
I think I'd put it here
From when I was a little baby
To my almost thirteen years

If I haven't learned a lesson
I'd definitely argue
I've read almost all of the great poems
And they taught me a lesson or two

If only love was this easy
I'd probably be married by now
But that emptiness is still here
And I don't know how

If only nature could be the way
I picture it in my eyes
Oh for joy I'd jump,I'd pray
And tell the city goodbye

If only there was a way to cure depression
The ones here showed me how
And thanks to them and my friends
I am not dead
I bet the demons in he11 say wow

If only in the special events
I did not cheer them on
How come they always warm my heart
And make me want to sing a song?

I'm thankful to all the different versions
Of soft or hardcore poetry
That have turned me into something different
So I can find the strength to still be me
Even though the world
Is turning little girls
Into street _______s at age 10
I hope I never am turned into that
I do not want to look like them
Thanks to poems and art,I can express myself

The world has taught me something
All because of poetry
Which has become my favorite hobby
And with it I feel sweet

But are you still wondering
How I manage to carry on?
It's because each of you show me
What's right and what's wrong
So I don't hang out with the wrong crowd
Or actually reduce
I hope I will always carry this wonder
So if one day must I use
Even if the world
May one day crash on me
I hope that forever
I can hold on to poetry
For my life
My death
And in between
For sure
So I'll always be me
Even if I've just been in a fight
I retreat to here
Even if I've just finished sleeping
I wake up to the computer so near
I tremble as a new thought
Comes inside my head
And to those around me
They just feel my cheeks go red
Because images are always in my heart
And when they touch me I know just where to start
With one word
And a bit of paper
I make a story come to life
Thank you for reading
And taking the time
Goodbye.

Promises that you made,
But failed to keep.
The sincerity in your voice,
Made me fall deep.

Words that you said,
Did you mean them or not?
I expected too much,
And deserved what I got.

What started as innocent,
Ended in pain.
The happiness you brought,
I could not maintain.

In times we didn't speak,
The reasons were not clear.
Despite what you did,
I will always be here.

The feelings rush back,
When I see you.
Secretly hoping,
That you feel it too.

I'm edging into this again,
Without any blinders on.
The last time this happened,
I blinked and you were gone.

I'm not expecting much this time,
Seems you like to let me down.
Say you like to see me smile,
Yet always make me frown.

I will just sit here waiting.
Will you notice what you use to see?
Beginning to think what he said was right,
You are just using me.

Knowing me, a sucker for pain,
I'll wait around anyway.
I will just be here hanging
Off every word you say.

Of Oncoming Storms

Of nigh oncoming storms,
the fear within us all,
I know we are alone,
whatever may befall.

Of dim, enclouded skies.
The dark have we become.
Transparency am I.
I know what we have done.

Of silence, and the rain
that bitterly does fall.
Sin in every eye.
Tonight shall pay for all.

Of hands that do not hold,
and feet that walk away.
Wind has come upon us.
This storm will not allay.

Diet Pills
by Sarah Drew

Why do they all do that to themsleves
They think they have to be perfect
That they're never good enough
So they take some pills
Get surgery,
Or skip some meals
When all that does is make them sick
They're slowly killing themselves
For what they see as beautiful
They torture they're bodies
They all have to look like the girls on T.V.
They all want to be the image of perfection
When really there is no such thing
So they take all those pills
And slowly massacre themsleves
Slowly fading away to nothing
They think that if they lose enough weight
Dress all the same
Or act a certain way
That they will get everything they want
But in fact all these things cause
Are pain, suffering, and death

so far everyone's poems have been awesome this is going to be difficult lol =) keep it up everybody!

--emotionless19*

Cranium Exterminatus

Start the journey ended here,
Born of ashen dreams of fear,
Take the crook and staff of old,
I will watch as things unfold

As you pass these crimson gates,
Your path is known only by Fates

Now that you've started,
You cannot stop,
Climbing, climbing till the top

You come across a twisted being,
Then you realise what your seeing,
Is in-fact my mind in wane,
Cry for the creature you have slain

Delving further through the red,
You find the things I have not said,
Heart breaking as you hear them,
And now you know why I have feared them

Running now from all the pain,
Still trying to be sane,
You know that you will soon be dead,
So why'd you go inside my head?

*to be ignored*

by Jerry Scott

Hickory dikory dock
Paper, scissors, rock
Memory lane
Childhood games
No slowing down the clock.

Meenie, Minie, Moe
Watch the time go
Slips away
Everyday
Best prepare your soul.

Father Time is no friend
For which you can depend
Better smile
For in a while
All comes to an end

Hickory dikory dock
Paper, scissors, rock
Winter frost
Childhood lost
In cadence to tic toc...tic toc.

Forget Me

Wake up and breathe,
You should be happy now, you're rid of me!
Smile and live again,
For you bare nothing, I hold the shame!

Laugh and flirt,
For she will never know of all the ones you've hurt!
Live and take her out,
For she has no reason, your honesty to doubt....

Forget me,
For you couldn't see,
See, all the damage carved into my heart,
For I am the victim of the love YOU tore apart!

Carry on with your life,
For this is not your battle, it's my strife.
Go out and make new friends,
For your life is not the life that will end!

Place her on a pedastel, Hold her high,
For she is not the girl you caused to cry!
Catch her when she falls for you,
For surely that is what you want her to do!

Forget me, I don't exist,
Like the blood that pumps from your heart to your wrists....
Forget me, I am nothing at all,
For I am shattered.... You never caught my fall!!!

The mud puddle
by Just-take-my-heart-i-want-you-to-have-it

The simple tap
on the roof top calls
it beckons me
now i must go
outside i am now
roaming, wandering here and there
what does it want
how do i answer
where can i find it
then i see it
all filed with love
now i am closer
close enough to touch it
jump!!!
splash!!!
right into it
it, the mud puddle

*hope you enjoyed it*

he he he happy new year everyone

Revealing the obscured:

Fright strikes so suddenly
filling up your mind
You are now in custody
That's what life designed

Scared to keep on going
afraid of the unkown
petrified to know the truth
shocked of what is shown

Trying to adjust your thoughts
to this new revelation
You're challenging the desert droughts
of existance own creation

No Words are Strong Enough
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Dear love
Pardon me if words of love
are not common in my speech
For I believe
Love is how I feel
And not in the words that I speak
But I try hard
For words are all that we have
To make sense of this love

Day by day
I learn to love you in different ways
With thoughts of you
I begin my day
As I breath in
Your love in the air

Every time you say
I love you
My heart skips a beat
I can barely feel my weight
As I drift away
between the clouds
Tango across the rainbows
and waltz around the moon

Reasons I love you
Are more then I can count
For even forever
would not be enough

So pardon me,
If words of love
are not enough
to cover the distance between us
Because,
and only because
No words are strong enough.

are there any more submissions? cause im going to start judging soon =)! deadline is tomorrow!

--emotionless19*

How The Past is Never Forgotten

We always talked as friends,
Flirted as lovers, but
Your girlfriend didn't know
The difference.
Time went by, we grew apart.
You graduated, started working.
My next year in class was lonely,
For I didn't have you by my side.
We didn't play ball anymore,
We didn't see each other at school.
I moved so we didn't live in
The same town, I couldn't run
Into you while you were at work.
Time went by, I'd forgotten
About you. Friends and I
Went to have a good time
Forget about our problems.
But when we ran into you
It brought back so many memories.
We sat in the front row,
Just to sit together.
You kept flirting with me, I
Was thinking of old times.
But just like the past
You never knew how I
Felt about you.

Shards

The violence that drives me
It's healed by your smile
It's hard to say it but
I need to keep protecting you.

Love, warmth; they are trivial
I can't protect or believe in anything
Anything I touch just falls apart
For now, the world's hatred burns

The lonely moon that fully rises
It is wavering in the darkness
Yes, it's alright when I am by myself
The flame is a fragment of the burning moon.

The sky becoming stained by the dark red color
Is that the color of blood?
I feel kindness for some reason
Everyone is lighting their heart
with their beloved people
It's like the sunset.
But yet, I am dying.

Even though the night approaches,
the thick darkness
Surrounds the town and people,
No, it can't remove
The dark in my heart.

But, my evil, embraces the darkness,
Touching it with warm, loving strokes,
Tendrils of fear, hatred, and pain.
What is happening?

The blossoming,
Night approaches,
Moon shining,
Fog filling in,
Darkness wavering,
Lonely moon,
Lonely man,
Perhaps we are one.

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Sitting In The Corner

Sitting in the corner,
with my knees against my chest,
I cry.

Crying in the corner,
with my thoughts driving me mad,
I think.

Thinking in the corner,
with my life so in distress,
I weep.

Weeping in the corner,
with myself being depressed,
I stress.

Stressing in the corner,
with my gun up to my head,
I fear.

Fearing in the corner,
with my body shaking,
I tremble.

Trembling in the corner,
with my knees up to my chest,
with my thoughts driving me mad,
with my life so in distressed,
with myself being depressed,
with my gun up to my head,
with my body shaking,
I die.

© 1998 David Velazquez. All rights reserved by author

heyy guys wow! Im surprised by the number of people who entered good luck to everyone =).. I'll be judging tomorrow and should have the results by late tomorrow or on sunday for sure ;) or just as soon as possible.. soo this is last chance to enter k? byee everyone and great job ;)...

--emotionless19.*

Okay you guys I'm done reading your poems over and over to decide on a winner.. I have to say I am very impressed all these poems were so well written with so much emotion! Great Job everyone! But in all contest there has to be a winner.. dont be discouraged if you didnt place in 1st, 2nd, or 3rd because they were all good poems and I'll still be commenting on one poem for anyone who entered =).. Here are the results...

1st- Tiffany
2nd- La Boricua *BX Girl*
3rd- ShadowedPhoenix

Great job everyone I'll be start commenting later tonight and should be done in a few days-to a week.. since I have school on monday I won't have time to finish them all, while trying to give you guys good comments on your poems in a short period.. but i'll get it done for sure ;)! Once again congrats to the winners and everyone who entered..

--emotionless19*

Wow this must have been very hard for you to judge. So many talented poets.
Very good choices, but I have to confess that I didn't see that coming.

Did you look at
Mister Retribution
"Cranium Exterminatus"

Its an incredible piece. It has form, flow and direction.
the lines are not to long or to short and compliment each other well, the rhymes were not forced, and the language and grammar are beautiful.

Second I thought was David Velazquez piece
Sitting In The Corner

It's a rare if not unique form. He uses 3 lines that compliment and interlock with the next 3 lines. the lines stay within each others length.. then finishes with an incredible climax of emotions.

I'm looking forward to your next contest.. maybe then I'll enter my own poem. :)

I won! =)

lol sorry you guys commenting has been slow ill try to finish as soon as possible but schools just started so im getting caught up with that but i promise i will try and finish soon=)

--emotionless19*