3 for 10

roll up roll up! I'm feeling charitable. If you want help improving then give an honest critique on any three of my poems and I'll do the same for ten of yours.

By critique I don't mean "wow! rilly good work 5/5!!!" I want to know what you think of as you're reading my poems as well as how you think I can make them better.

Cheers.

I will when I get the chance but I'm busy right now.If you could read my most recent for as well as, "In Mommy's Arms" I will read three of yours when I get a chance. Promise.

I will go do three of yours right now I just wrote a new poem called Untitled can you please do that one. I don't have any comments on it that aren't great job lala be honest you wont hurt my feelings and then any other 9 you want

Alright I just commented three or yours. Feel free to comment mine whenever you have the time. Thanks alot!!

I'll have to read yours in the morning : (

hey i like your poems! they are awsome!
could you please comment on my ten newest.
thanks and love
Mel

All done! I did 4 of your poems and I really liked them. They had a lot of meaning. However, some did not go much into depth. I would love for a poet such as yourself to criteque some of my work! Feel free to do any of em... peace (=

Ok, thanks everyone, I'll get on the comments from monday onwards.

Offer still open!

i will do them,

I r/r/c on 3 of your poems

Could you please r/r/c on:

1. The first time
2. i love you, i love you so
3. I miss you
4. Only you
5. Will you marry me?
6. I can make the imposible
7. I will still love you
8. Your eyes
9. All i want
10. Deep in your eyes

Wilco all, just been held up, probably until next tuesday, what with Dragon Con and all that jazz.

Don't worry, I WILL get to you all.

Is the offer still open? =P

yep!

i think i did more than three, they were all so good. and my comments are rather long, i hope thats a good thing!

you can read any of mine that you like, theres no rush :)

hey biscuit, thanks for the comments, nicely thought out.

I'll return the favour as soon as I can. I read the poem about your sister (something surpise?!) and really enjoyed it, but I'm short on time what with the trip and all.

Glad you like them.

Can you just read my one

Is this still open? I'd love to do it...

And I'll even do 5 of yours for 10 of mine... -Shrugs- I feel nice today. =]

xDarkSuicidex

Sure thing, go for it!

I'll do this asap, sweetie... I have homework that I really shouldn't be ignoring. I'll finish yours tonight, most likely... If you want any certain ones done, though, post them here. ((I'd prefer it if you did, really.))

xDarkSuicidex

Ok, I'll give you a few to make you think!

Regulate [Verkehrsregelung] (Try and find the hidden meanings by tracing the phrases used)

Incandescence (is it a poem or is it a story? Maybe it's both)

Rigour (a dark poem with a slightly hidden message)

A Word in the Hand (I dare you to write in this style)

Why We Write (spot the haikus)

That should be a good mix, and should also give you plenty to think about.

Alright... Done!

I didn't do Rigour because I've already done it... So I only did 4. Sorry.

Nicely written, though! As always!

xDarkSuicidex

I'll do it!!!

Please r/r/c

-Under Skin of lace
-Numb

And whatever else you want

Hey just wonderin when your gonna post your comments on mine. Whenever you have free time is fine but just out of curiousity

As I said above I'll get to you all after Dragon Con.

I'm leaving today and will be back sometime on tuesday.

Have a good weekend everybody.

Right, I am back from Atlanta after a most gruelling week and I will get to those of you who have not had their comments done yet.

Offer be closed for now ye hearties!

Oppsie daisy..

I'm Late..
;-)

well it is a good idea even if the board is closed!

What is a poem?

1. a composition in verse, esp. one that is characterized by a highly developed artistic form and by the use of heightened language and rhythm to express an intensely imaginative interpretation of the subject.

2. composition that, though not in verse, is characterized by great beauty of language or expression: a prose poem from the Scriptures; a symphonic poem.

Ok folks I've been reading a lot of your work over the last few days and I have to say that I'm disappointed. Although poetry is a good way to get your feelings out and release some pressure, or to relate your experiences in life to others, it has to have some substance.

Example:

I thought you loved me
but it was a lie
you never cared at all
and it hurts me so much

This is not a poem, it's two sentences broken down to form a verse so to look like a poem. There is no prose, no thought to diction, vernacular or punctuation. It's a statement.

I thought you loved me but it was a lie. You never cared at all and it hurts so much.

See what I mean?

When you write a poem don't just express your feelings, try to push yourself in your chosen language. Be stylistic, study some real poetry and experiment!!!!

Seriously, I'm tired of reading the same statements day in day out.

'Til Poetry Could Stand
Solitude

I only had time to read a few your a grate writer. I marked you as a favorit so i can read the rest at my leasure.

OK folks, sorry about the wait, things have been really hectic and I haven't had any time to myself.

I'm starting on those that I couldn't get to before the proverbial hit the fan.

Is this still open?

If you don't mind waiting in the queue for me to get to you, then feel free!

OK, Garbear and Kaylee done.

alright...rrc'd 3 poems...they were really nice.
Can you please do :
"Remember"
"Who am I?"
"Her Game of Life"
"Tell Her"
"Our LIfe"
"Her Daily Shower"
"Lies"
"Hidden World"
"Suiside of the Heart"
&&
"Quiet Ocean"
Thankyou