Titled Contest.

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Teardrops On My Guitar ; By: Italian Stallion - You always amaze me with the way that you can write love poem after love poem and it is always an original poem. Usually, a person writes one and all of the others are the exact same. I loved the twist in this one, it was really good as was the imagery. Keep it up, Hun.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 19/20

Our Song ; By: Ciao - I loved this, reminded me at a few parts of the song Leave the Pieces by The Wreckers, and at other parts of the song Picture To Burn by Taylor Swift lol. Anyways, the imagery and word choice in this poem was spot on, I really enjoyed reading it.
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 16.5/20

Permanent marker ; By: Average Teenage Girl - I loved the way that you started this poem as well as how you ended it. Weird because I normally hate suicide poems because they are all so cliched, but this one was different and I love how you tied in a real life event into it, that really helped. Good job. :]
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 3/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 15/20

A Place In This World ; By: Poetess - Wow, I absolutely loved the content of this poem, it was very inspirational and spoke the truth, and I enjoyed reading it. Your word choice was great and your flow was as well. Keep it up. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 20/20

Cold As You ; By: Josie - At first, no offence, but I wasn't really into it. But then near the end, my opinion really changed on it. The end line was very strong, which is something that I look for when I read a poem and near the middle of this one, you really turned it around.
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 17.5/20

Pictures To Burn ; By: Josie - This one was different then what I had expected to come out of this, which is a good thing, but you need to add more grammar into it to help improve the flow, I think that would really help this one.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

Stay Beautiful ; By: Sheena - Wow, this went a total different way than I had expected it to go, but it was a good thing. It kept me hooked from start to finish and your wording and descriptions were spot on, good job. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 19/20

Come In With The Rain ; By: Wings of Flames - I liked the descriptions in this, however, it skipped around a bit. I got very confused the first time I read it and when I read it over a few more times I was still a little confused. Don't get me wrong, I did like this; I guess I just missed the main point of it somewhere.
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 3.5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 16.5/20

Permanent Marker ; By: Mountain Dew - I liked the flow and the word choice of this, however, the ending in my opinion could have been a little stronger. It was good but the whole poem was pretty strong and in that case, the end needs to be stronger than the rest of the poem. Just my opinion though. Also, I's should always be capitalized. Good job, :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

I'd lie ; By: Teria - Wow, did I ever love the whole idea of this poem lol, it really blew me away. I loved the descriptions and the flow, it was all very good. I did not expect something like this to come out of a title like this, but am very glad it did :] Great job.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18.5/20

As cold as you ; By: Teria - I loved the overall idea put into this poem, it was unexpected but it really made me smile when I read it to know that there are still some original poets out there and that they are entering into my contests. :D
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 19/20

Should've Said No ; By: Charisma - Wow! Hunnie, this poem I'm sure will touch thousands of teenage mothers and even not teenage mothers. It sends out a really good message to people and it is one that needs to be heard instead of lost within the not-so-important ones that are being pushed to the top. I loved this, I am speechless.
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 19.5/20

You Don't Have To Call ; By: Ciao - I liked this, I think you just tore at a thousand and one teenage girls hearts with this piece. I loved some of the imagery that you used, you spaced it out wellâ?¦it wasnâ??t a bunch of metaphors crammed into a few lines lol, good job Dear. :]
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 16.5/20

Come in With the Rain ; By: Rhianna - I loved this, it was probably the length of the lines because it has been a very long day and this was an easy read but it also didn't bore me, which is good. :D
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

Tied Together With a Smile ; By: Charisma - I loved this, as I love every poem that you enter into my contests but there were a few things that didn't make much sense to me; nothing too serious, though - as always, you did an awesome job Hun. :]
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

Outside ; By: Carrie - Wow, where do I even begin? This is my favorite piece that I have read of yours so far. It has to be. This really inspired me as I'm sure it will to many others as well. You did a great job on this, I don't even know what to say lol.
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18.5/20

Stay Beautiful ; By: Espoir*failed - Wow, the word choice in this was indescribable. I read through it and didn't have to stop once, although the flow was a bit off; it was nothing too serious. It reminded me of a song that Dashboard Confessional would sing :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 17.5/20

Should've Said No ; By: Sheena - I loved this! I cannot believe this wasn't on the list of poems of yours that are your favorite lol. The word choice in this was great, the descriptions, the imagery...everything, I enjoyed reading this, truly did. :D
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

Picture to Burn ; By: SecludedSerendipity - Wow, this has got to be the best poem of yours that I have read so far - and that is saying a lot because I have read a lot of your poems! Your word choice was awesome in this and it told a story; all the while telling it very well lol. Good job Dear. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL -19 /20

When You Think Tim McGraw ; By: Britt - Aweh, this reminded me of myself lol. I love Tim McGraw, I love you and I loved this poem lol. Every teenage girl can more than likely relate to this poem, whether they are a Tim McGraw fan or not. Great job, :]
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18.5/20

Tied Together With a Smile ; By SecludedSerendipity - Wow, so many people will be able to relate to this poem, Dear. I loved this; although it was about cutting, I still found it very relatable because it is what so many people do. The wording was wonderful as was the imagery, it caught my attention with the very first line and kept it until the last; great job. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 1/2
TOTAL - 18.5/20

Teardrops on my guitar ; By: disturbed one - I loved this, your rhyming was spot on and the flow was wonderful. With the imagery used in this, you were able to put yourself in the position and see it all, this was my favorite poem that I have read of yours so far. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 5/5
FOLLOWED RULES -2 /2
TOTAL - 20/20

You Don't Have To Call ; By: Laura - I liked how the final words in the stanzas sort of brought the whole stanzas together and made it make more sense. However, I did get kind of confused the first time I read it through. I liked the imagery and wording in this, though. Great job. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 3/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 16/20

Outside ; By: Sarah Elliott - I didn't think I was going to like this at first but as I read on I really fell in love with this poem. It is so true, and I absolutely despise animal cruelty. Great job Darling, :]
SPELLING - 2.5/3
GRAMMAR - 4.5/5
CONTENT - 5/5
FLOW - 4.5/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18.5/20

I'd Lie ; By: Saraphene - You need to take the time to edit your poems, this has a lot of potential to it but the mistakes that are there are ones that stick out to picky readers such as me. This kind of skipped around, and was not tied together with grammar which made it a little harder to read and comprehend. But, if you fixed up a few things, it would be really good. :]
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 3.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 15.5/20

Mary's Song. {Oh, my, my, my.} ; By: Sheena - I liked this, it seems someone has a little pent up rage inside of her, lol. It did kind of skip around though near the end, but when I read it a second time I liked it. I really liked how you hid the words in [] that really tied it together for me, good job. :]
SPELLING - 3/3
GRAMMAR - 5/5
CONTENT - 4/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 18/20

Can I please reserve, Teardrops On My Guitar

Thanks, Joe

Teardrops On My Guitar
By: Italian Stallion

The moment I saw you,
I knew you where the one.
Your eyes where glistening,
And told me, I love you.

Our hands met,
Just like our eyes.
Our hearts where mending,
For the love of one another.

But overtime you slipped away,
And left me here all alone.
Not knowing what to do
Or even what to say.

Teardrops on my guitar,
As I play this sad song.
Forever is what we said,
However it has come to an end.

© Copyright 2007 By: Italian Stallion

*mumbles not nice words to Joe* I wanted that one... curse you! lmao

I'll take... gosh they are all so good! Our Song plz Jenna dear!

heartcha.

edit. missed the rules... lmao but I'll still take Our Song... :]

Our Song

I deleted you of my phone; I didn't know what else to do.
I couldn't stand the lies and everything you put me through.
All the letters have been thrown away because you couldn't care less.
Just go away, leave me alone, I can deal with this mess.

The heartache will go away; the tear drops, they will fade-
I'll burn the pictures on the wall as with the memories made.
No longer do I need your love to hold me strong;
Because everything is right now and you are just wrong.

The pillow no longer holds the makeup the tears washed away-
No longer does my calendar mark our special day.
Everything is fine now, I'm moving on alone.
You were always trouble; I guess I should've known.

I only have one down fall, it's sad, some may say.
I can't help if because it's with me everyday.
It's the one thing keepng me holding out so long-
Baby, it's the lyrics and the melody of Our Song.

Cold As You plz... I really like these titles...

hearcha.

May i also please have "Cold as You" and "Picture to Burn"?

Thanks

Josie

Can i have 'you don't have to call'?
Thanks alot hun
Take care
Sincerely,
Laura

Er I'm changing because I'm indecisive.. Picture to Burn plz deary!

I'm indecisive and getting out of writer's block. i really would like to write something new. so if i do manage to write something i'll be using the titles: tied together..., our song, i'd lie.

thnks.

Permanent marker

Does it HAVE to be new? cuz i have a poem i really like for teardrops on my guitar that i wrote awhile back

I'll also reserve You Don't Have To Call and then I am done! <33 heartcha babe!

Reserve permanent marker plz? Thankyou

Disturbed, if you have one resembling the title, you may add it.

Permanent marker

A beautifully broken hearted girl
Stands alone in her world of abuse
The only source of escape
Is to dream of the world we called normal.

The torments rip her apart
The mental abuse confuses her
Oh how she longs for it all to end
But deep down she knows forever it will go on.

She sits in her room
Where her mother often confines her
Thinking about what she could become
If only people would give her that chance

Never part of the family
As hard as she tries
She is trying to impress her Mother
But she just gets a slap in return

She goes to her father
She tries telling him what Mother does
Completely blanking her as if she didnt exist
The girl sits there and cries her heart out.

Once again she gets a blow
And is sent up to solitary confinement
Daily occurrences, her normal routine
For trying to reach out for the love and attention.

Nasty, abnormal, accident, naughty
Forever replayed on her mind
Hideous, repulsive, vile, frightful
Forever written across her heart.

So that that final day
She decides she has had enough
She grabs a permanent marker
And starts to write upon the walls.

...I dont understand this...She begins
...Why am I not treated equally...
...I hate this world; I hate all of you...
...I wish I was never born...

Still holding the pen she walks to the window,
She begins to write ...Am I pretty enough now?...
The she plunges out of the window and feels so free
Free from the world that she lived and never will again.

...XxJustYourAverageTeenageGirlxX...

This is a new one...^^...But does it stil class as new if i add it to my poems now?

Yes, it still counts as new..you can add them to your poems lol.

Tied Together With a Smile

and....

Should've Said No

plz!

(i almost held this as my own contest!)
Charisma*

Cold As You AND I'd lie, please.

<3

oh, yeah. I'm leaving tomorrow night, and will be gone until thursday.I'll try to get the poems done tonight or in the morning, I'm sure I will.. but just in case, i thought i'd let you know, hun.

-Teria.

Cold As You

The day you left me
Was the day i died.
I lay for hours
On my bed and cried.

There wasn't even a goodbye
Or a hint that you would leave.
I trusted you when you said
You loved only me.

But you just left
As if you were never mine
I can't believe I thought you were a man,
That you had a spine.

And now in my grave I lie
Killed by you.
The nail in my coffin
Was the fact that your love was never true.

I have cried
My final crimson tears
Today I will rise, haunt you
And be your worst fear.

Now dead and pale
I rise from my icy tomb.
But still I will never be
As cold as you...

Josie

CopyrightJosieWentzel01May2007

Pictures To Burn

Memories have scarred my mind
Thoughts been embossed on my dreams
I could never forget you
Or so it seemed.

Pictures in my mind
Pictures to burn.
Once I did
But no longer do I yearn.

These images I see
Once filled me with joy.
But no more -
My sanity it has destroyed.

Pictures of you
Pictures to burn
It was a difficult lesson
I was forced to learn.

My dreams
Were once comforting
But now they frighten me -
They are haunting.

Pictures of love
Pictures to burn
I've erased my memories
Soon it'll be your turn.

You'll become
Nothing to me
Nothing but
A bad memory.

Pictures in my mind
Pictures of you
Pictures of love
My thinking is now through...

Josie

CopyrightJosieWentzel01May2007

Thank-you Teria, for letting me know. You are reserved. =)

I don't know if I'll get them done, but I really want to try.
I want "Should've Said No," and "Stay Beautiful," please.
Thanks, kiddo. =]

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

I'll have "come in with the rain". thanks =)

Coul d you please take me off of tied together with a smile.

thnks.

This is far from my best, and you'll agree, but it's all I could come up with so quickly. Sorry. =[ I may rewrite it, but don't hold me to that..
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Stay Beautiful {Shakespearen Sonnet}

This is about a girl committing suicide and someone standing over her talking to her and telling her to [insert last line of poem here.]

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You are beautiful when you cry;
In water your eyes glimmer.
A quick prayer to help you die,
You're world is getting dimmer.

Tears leak down a sorry face;
You might not want to get caught.
Cling on to life and touch base;
You did give your best shot.

Ugly gasping sounds surround you;
Is this how they will remember?
Help, help, help! You're falling through
Into the black darkened ember.
Battle yourself on the level;
Stay beautiful for the devil.
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A Sonnet is a poem consisting of 14 lines (iambic pentameter) with a particular rhyming scheme:

Examples of a rhyming scheme:

#1) abab cdcd efef gg
#2) abba cddc effe gg
#3) abba abba cdcd cd

A Shakespearean (English) sonnet has three quatrains and a couplet, and rhymes abab cdcd efef gg.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

Come In With The Rain

Crystals fall from the cloud,
As doors open, windows close,
Typically cover is taken,
So this is what they've chose,

Summer's rain, God's tears,
But within sadness comes grace,
A spectical of beauty,
As terror finds this face,

As she scuttles away,
I stand in the dark,
The tears still dripping,
I still feel her hark,

Cold and nothingness,
Content with this position,
I may stay longer,
Longer in this condition,

A subtle blank face,
In a coat fit for no one,
A God! I think not.
Not even Michael's* son.

The cracks of light appear,
But though I feel no warm,
The wind picks at my skin,
And then the splitting of a storm.

(Archangel michael, angelic warrior of healing)

© Wings Of Flames May 3rd 2007

Permanent Marker

I wrote your name in permanent marker
and I wrote it on my heart
and everyday, it's been written there
until the day you broke it apart

You broke my heart to pieces
and left them lying on the floor
you left me one big crying mess
and you just walked out the door

I scrubbed and scrubbed for hours
days and weeks in fact
I couldn't wash away permanent marker
of the love that was just an act

An act set up for an audience
laughing at all of my pain
like my life was one big comedy
watching as i go insane

Loosing grip upon black marker
trying to cross your name out
black X's all upon it
my heart is filled with doubt

Worried it might stay there
like a lingering last kiss
saying it will wash away
ignorance is bliss

Black permanent marker
now glued to my fingers
forced to write upon my heart
bitter words that linger

I tried and tried again
to get your name to go away
one life lesson that I now have learned
is permanent marker always stays

I'd lie.

Seldom do you hear the words of the dead
coming from your lonesome surroundings.
The chills that are lent to the toes from your head,
just give meaning to a suspicious mind.
For, there's no such thing as ghosts.

Yet, there's angels and demons running our lives?
Millions of stars filling up the sky?
There's things we can't see, emotions we can't feel..
So, what makes you think that ghosts aren't real?

Is it the fear of the truth that might set you free?
Or the fear of the truth that might captivate your life?
Is it the feelings you'll hide for eternity?
Or the millions of reasons that you just
can't seem to tell me?

Yet, you can say to my face, " I don't believe."
You can push me around, telling those fibs.
You can say what you want, just as long..
As you don't admit I'm right and you're wrong.

I'd lie if I said I believe what you say.
I'd lie if I said I knew you were telling the truth.
But, sometimes the unseen stays gone through the day.
Forever hiding from what humans
tend to know, do and say

As cold as you.

Dreary thoughts tremble
through-out my mind.
Surely, this is not
what you'll find.
You're searching
inside of me,
for the things that
resemble you.

The heart so cold,
empty, yet wet.
The soul so dry,
filled with anger inside.
The eyes causing pain,
from all the stare downs.
The piece broken off,
cutting others wrists.

Seldom do you see,
the things inside of me.
That remind me of you,
and all your stupid ways.
But, every now and then..
There's something deep inside.
That triggers my mind
to be as cold as you.

I'll try Outside.

Should've Said No

Went to a party where she shouldn't have been
Thought it'd be fun to hang with her friends.
Parents worried too much, so she'd just go.
She wouldn't be long, they'd never know.

She had a few drinks after they made fun.
She couldn't stand to be the only sober one.
And after a couple of wisecracks and jokes
She too, took part in whatever they smoked.

Stumbling down the hall, with a hot guy
Didn't seem wrong after all that night.
The party was great, and she went home,
Thinking to herself, they'll never know.

A few weeks passed, and it never came.
The time of the month that was always the same.
She ran to the drugstore nearest the school
Three tests later, the party wasn't so cool.

She drove herself home, held her head low.
Voices in her head saying, "You should've said no."
A future down the drain, parents yet to face.
All because she felt a little out of place.

A new life within her own made this a mess.
Nobody would've known, if she'd never said yes.
Now the party that lasted for a single night
Has completely changed the rest of her life.

By: Charisma*

You Don't Have To Call

Standing under the streetl amp, with ashen light cast around,
Looking at your feet and kicking at the ground.
The tears are drying up, but the pain, it still hurts;
Thinking of it now, knowing that it wouldn't work.

He's staring at you; how you can feel his eyes set in-
You're trying not to show the pain you're hiding within.
How broken you heart is; the true feelings inside;
The real amount of tears that you have silently cried.

He's trying so hard to talk, but you're pushing him away;
You just can take all of this for one more day.
Being a liar and so two-faced, with both of them so pretty-
As you stand there crying, under the lights of the city.

No amount of anything could make this all okay-
You're slowly breaking his heart with each word you say.
"Please, I'm sorry, but you're just not my all."
As you turn to walk away, you whisper: "You Don't Have To Call."

~*~"Come in With the Rain"~*~

The sky was dark
As black as night
Blasts of thunder
Bolts of light

The door blew open
The rain beat down
But in the midst of this chaos
You are no where around

My child of darkness
Come in with the rain
Shut out your fears
Lock up the pain
The rain may beat harder
The rain may flood in
But you can try to be free
You can shun your dark sin

The trees were blowing
Bending at the limb
Rain waters grew deeper
Reality looked grim

A tree lit on fire
From the light of the sky
As it burned to the ground
Rain-like tears fell from our eyes

My child of darkness
Come in with the rain
Shut out your fears
Lock up the pain
The rain may beat harder
The rain may flood in
But you can try to be free
You can shun your dark sin.

Copyright (C): Rhianna

I'll do a place in this world.

Tied Together With a Smile

I've lost the faith to keep going on
And my will has walked away
Hope in tomorrow doesn't last long.
It will end the same as yesterday.

I can stand next to you and feel apart
Because your mind isn't here.
Just like I hold you close in my heart
You hold this new stranger dear.

The thread tying what I had together
Is loosing itself through my holes
Inching away like hopes of forever
Leaving behind a barren soul

Each time I'm around you it gets worse
And these tears barely stay in
Then later on in them I immerse
As they tear me down once again.

It's an illusion that I'm not really falling
Because I've tripped quite awhile.
But you can't see I'm truly crawling
Because I'm tied together with a smile.

By: Charisma*

Outside

If you never climb the mountain,
You'll always fear the height,
If you live your life in darkness,
You'll never find the light.

Outside, the world is waiting,
For courage to break free,
A voice to sooth the bitterness,
A soul of unity.

You touched the depths of lonely,
And recognized a friend,
They pulled you out of misery,
Helped your wounds to mend.

Still you're locked inside your prison,
Afraid of what could be,
Glad to hide your eyes from all,
You could not bear to see.

But outside there is beauty,
Kindness, love and joy,
This fear of pain and heartache,
Is meant only to destroy.

Tame this burning beast,
That set your sight aflame,
Step into the sweet light,
Outside the dark of shame.

Ugh. This is frustrating. I've had writer's block, and I can't figure our how to start things, so I'll have to pull from this too. *sigh*

GOOD LUCK EVERYONE!

Oooh could i have stay beautiful please???
thanks a lot xxx