High Speed Connection

by Lonely Little Dreamer   Apr 25, 2008


Tick, tick, tick, goes the tapping of fingertips;
As the 3PM bomb approaches sweet climax.
Bam! Brief satisfaction.
Releasing institutionalized drones off to the world.
Single file they march, silent, they reach their goal;
Paying tribute to the time card god.

Regrouping at HOME base,
Forming average 4.5 families.
Self-absorbed husbands,
Buying lust off the interwebs.
Hideously picture perfect plastic wives,
Forced into pill popping frenzy, a cure for loneliness;
While their children are surviving,
Life lines attached to a virtual reality world.

Viral syndrome: work, sleep, repeat;
Slowly depletes our creative potential.
Humanity failing, culture now lost.

SYSTEM ERROR!
World crashing; in 3, 2, 1...

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  • 15 years ago

    by ReinaLuvzYoo

    WWwWo0o0o0o0o0owWwW is all i can say.... i luv this poem it makes so much sense...its so true...the words u chose are a fantastic fit in the poem... its so realistic and so mysterious... i really really really like it i really enjoyed reading it please write more poems yoo are so good!!!!! well done

  • 15 years ago

    by bRiNgMeToLiFe

    Very true,I liked it.
    Good imagery.
    5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Krathia

    Delivers a bitter message and hits hard. I didn't understand the first stanza, but the rest was great.

    Stanza 2:
    "Self-absorbed husbands,
    Buying lust off the interwebs."
    -shakes head- The way your worded it was fantastic. Buying lust...
    "Hideously picture perfect plastic wives,"
    I was a little confused here; thought that it was the husbands who were picturing perfect plastic wives off the interwebs, but I reread it and got the picture. I'd try rewording it though.
    "While their children are surviving,
    Life lines attached to a virtual reality world."
    So so true... What is the world coming to? Anyhow, I don't think 'reality' is really needed here, merely saying 'virtual world' would be enough to get the point across. But you're the poet who decided, and it doesn't really matetr one way or the other.

    Stanza 3:
    "Viral syndrome: work, sleep, repeat;"
    Nicely done.
    "Slowly depletes our creative potential."
    I'd change 'creative' to a harsher word, one that hits harder. I can't think of one, though...

    Lovely ending, though I think it'd be better if you change the semi-colon to a colon.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lover Boii

    Excellent! A great diss to society. I love it!

  • 15 years ago

    by Wallace

    Oh and I voted this for the contest nominations as well, yepp its that good :)

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