Silent Killer

by Poetic Ninja aka Papachopchop   May 13, 2008


Somehow I think this is the end
Coughing up blood in the morning
My lungs releasing the one thing
That may be the real end,

I'm scared eternally
For what this life gives me now
I have got to beat this
But I have no idea how,

I've looked it up,
Symptoms and all,
But all it makes me do
Is make me want to crawl

Into a small space of life,
I don't know what to do!
Will this illness take me,
Before I am through?

I don't know what is wrong
I fear for the told story
When the doctor's examine
And tell me why to worry,

What did I do
To deserve such a fate?
Was it my smoking?
Did I initiate

All these things inside,
From smoking my dear cigs?
Will I end up with cancer
And have to wear wigs?

I refuse! I say,
I claim I'd rather die.
I don't care have many people
I shall ever make cry...

I beaten up my body
And I guess it says, quit!
I never thought this would happen
I was just such a twit!

Now will I
Lay down and die
So many people still
Talk to me and rely

On my opinion
I say, I have much to give,
I shall continue being me,
As long as I live.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Ares

    I love the honesty in this poem and I adore those stanzas where the fear and insecurity really shines through.

    You wrote it in a way I don't really see anywhere else in that you sort of mix the classic "lingo" of poetry with a more modern paranoia, if I can call it that. It was really refreshing to read and it bore a mix of fear, which I've said already and this feeling of not wanting to back down, which is really hard to do and even harder to get right.

    Thanks for your comment on my poem "The Princess of Darkness", much appriciated. I will keep a close look at your poetry from now on.

    --ares

  • 10 years ago

    by Sarah

    Please tell me that poem is not about you ??
    The agony is drifted within each line..
    Great heartbreaking poem... 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Nice job... i hope this isnt true. it so i hope you get better

    anyways the poem is written really well and its long but it doesnt feel like it drags on because every stanza was important

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Hidden1

    I like th is poem. Very moving and emotional. I jut hope that things get better and try to stay positive.. in spite of. Well written.

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Forced rhyming and poor grammar in this piece although the story was intended to be meaningful........